work product review

The following issues have been identified in the submitted work products and must be corrected before they can be uploaded to docs.oasis-open.org and the public review announced:

Key Management Interoperability Protocol Profiles version 1.0

1. Date: The date must be date the specification was approved as a Committee Draft and for Public Review. I believe this should be 5 November

[Please make sure you put the date of the meeting in your meeting minutes, as well as the list of attendees and whether or not the meeting was quorate]

2. Specification URIs:

a. This Version: The html link must be to an html page, not a zip file

b. Previous Version: Please insert 'N/A'

c. Latest Version: Please ensure that these are actual hypertext links and link to the proper location

The html link must be to an html page, not a zip file

URL need not be displayed; title of related work must hypertext link to current version and not latest one.

a. change point size of filename to 8pt

b. date must match that of the CD approval date

c. remove "OASIS trademarks ... apply" from footer

Add KMIP to the list of trademarked names in last paragraph

6. Table of Contents

This is very messed up; listing cover page items? Not sure how this happened

7. Normative References

Include Draft number and hypertext-linked URL to the named version of the specification

8. Non-normative References

Include Draft number and hypertext-linked URL to the named version of the specification

[NOTE: As you go forward you will want to use use the designated cross reference form of motions so that these references can be updated post-approval]

The Conformance section must be the last numbered section immediately preceding any appendices

10. Acknowlegements:

The following two members must be listed as Associate rather than displaying their company name (not organizational members)

Key Management Interoperability Protocol Specification Version 1.0

1. Date: The date must be date the specification was approved as a Committee Draft and for Public Review. I believe this should be 5 November

2. Specification URIs:

a. This Version: Please ensure that actual hypertext links are to the proper location

b. Previous Version: Please insert 'N/A'

3. Related Work:

URL need not be displayed; title of related work must hypertext link to current version and not latest one.

4. Document footer:

a. date must match that of the CD approval date

b. remove "OASIS trademarks ... apply" from footer

5. Notices page

Add KMIP to the list of trademarked names in last paragraph

6. Normative References

KMIP-Prof

Include Draft number and hypertext-linked URL to the named version of the specification

8. Non-normative References

KMIP-UG

Include Draft number and hypertext-linked URL to the named version of the specification

KMIP-UC

Include Draft number and hypertext-linked URL to the named version of the specification

9. Acknowlegements:

The following two members must be listed as Associate rather than displaying their company name (not organizational members)

Peter Zelechoski

Don McAlister

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Key Management Interoperability Protocol Usage Guide version 1.0

1. Date: The date must be date the specification was approved as a Committee Draft and for Public Review. I believe this should be 5 November

2. Specification URIs:

a. This Version: Please ensure that these are actual hypertext links and link to the proper location

b. Previous Version: Please insert 'N/A'

3. Related Work:

URL need not be displayed; title of related work must hypertext link to current version and not latest one.

4. Document footer:

a. date must match that of the CD approval date

b. remove "OASIS trademarks ... apply" from footer

5. Notices page

Add KMIP to the list of trademarked names in last paragraph

7. Normative References

KMIP-Spec

Include Draft number and hypertext-linked URL to the named version of the specification

KMIP-Prof

Include Draft number and hypertext-linked URL to the named version of the specification

8. Non-normative References

KMIP-UC

Include Draft number and hypertext-linked URL to the named version of the specification

[NOTE: As you go forward you will want to use use the designated cross reference form of motions so that these references can be updated post-approval]

9. Level 2+ Headings somehow were changed from Bold to Roman. Please ensure template styles are used.

Major Headings (Level 1) should start a new page. Rule is missing at major headings.

10. Conformance

The Conformance section is required, must be the last numbered section immediately preceding any appendices

11. Acknowlegements:

The following two members must be listed as Associate rather than displaying their company name (not organizational members)

Peter Zelechoski

Don McAlister

Key Management Interoperability Protocol Use Cases Version 1.0

1. Date: The date must be date the specification was approved as a Committee Draft and for Public Review. I believe this should be 5 November

2. Specification URIs:

a. This Version: Please ensure that these are actual hypertext links and link to the proper location

b. Previous Version: Please insert 'N/A'

c. Latest Version: Please ensure that these are actual hypertext links and link to the proper location

3. Technical Committee: Please ensure that hypertext link points to the TC's public home page

http://www.oasis-open.org/committees/tc_home.php?wg_abbrev=kmip

3. Related Work:

URL need not be displayed; title of related work must hypertext link to current version and not latest one.

4. Document footer:

a. date must match that of the CD approval date

b. remove "OASIS trademarks ... apply" from footer

5. Notices page

Add KMIP to the list of trademarked names in last paragraph

7. Normative References

KMIP-Spec

Include Draft number and hypertext-linked URL to the named version of the specification

KMIP-Prof

Include Draft number and hypertext-linked URL to the named version of the specification

9. Level 2+ Headings somehow were changed from Bold to Roman. Please ensure template styles are used.

Major Headings (Level 1) should start a new page. Rule is missing at major headings.

Line numbers are missing

10. Conformance

The Conformance section is required, must be the last numbered section immediately preceding any appendices

11. Acknowlegements:

The following two members must be listed as Associate rather than displaying their company name (not organizational members)

Peter Zelechoski

Don McAlister

For the first two specifications, the TC can make the appropriate changes and resubmit the Committee Draft, or, as an alternative, OASIS Staff will make the necessary changes upon request. The last two are missing conformance sections and will therefore need to be updated by the TC.

Regards,

Mary

Mary P McRae

Director, Standards Development

Technical Committee Administrator

OASIS: Advancing open standards for the information society

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