Re: [office-comment] Comments on Errata 01 (Committee Draft 03)

[Patrick Durusau <patrick@durusau.net>]

Murata-san,

Comments on your # 3, 4, 5:

MURATA Makoto (FAMILY Given) wrote:

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> 3) Correction to 9.3.3
>
> The editing instruction does not touch the first sentence but merely
> replaces the second with two sentences.  However, the first sentence
> looks unnecessary.
>
>   
The original defect read:

> Section 9.3.3, 37th line on page 304
>
> Current description: The object is contained within this sub page 
> exactly as it would as it is a document of its own.
> Proposal: The current sentence should be paraphrased in a different way. Please explain what "sub page" means and 
> what the whole sentence means. The whole sentence sounds to me as follows: The object is contained in the document 
> on the target page referenced by the xlink:href attribute although the source page does not actually contain the 
> object. For end users, it exactly looks like that the source page contains the object. Is my understanding correct?
>   
Comment:

The first sentence specifies the general rule for objects with an XML 
representation. Then, in response to the defect,
the details of the storage of such objects was added.

It may well be that a fully re-drafted version would further polish this 
section but as it stands the response answers the original question.
> 4) Correction to 15.31.4
>
> The editing instruction does not touch the first, second, and third
> sentences but merely replaces the rest of the paragraph.  However, the
> second and third sentences look unnecessary.  Even the first one can 
> be removed.
>   
The original defect read:

> Attribute names in 15.31.4 "Tick Marks" 
>
> Two attributes (chart:axis-interval-major and
> chart:axis-interval-minor) appear in the body text, while four
> different attributes, (chart:tick-marks-major-inner,
> chart:tick-marks-major-outer, chart:tick-marks-minor-inner, and
> chart:tick-marks-minor-outer) appear in the schema.
>   
Comment:

The defect pointed out a critical oversight in the prose, which was 
deeply appreciated.

However, correction of that oversight matters more than stylistic 
niceties that would be observed in a complete re-drafting. I do 
appreciate such insights but as you well know, such polishing is like 
pulling a thread that leads to another thread and then to another. 
However satisfying that may be, our public corrections to text to be in 
response to the corrections requested, not as licenses to correct all 
offenses against good style that may or may not appear in a text.

> 5) Correction 15.36
>
> It should be made clear where in the itemized list the four bullets 
> should be added.
>
>   
The original defect read:

> Missing bullets in 15.36 "Presentation Page Attributes"
>
>
> The itemized list immediately before 15.36.1 should enumerate all
> properties.  However, the following properties are missing, although
> they do appear in subsubsections of 15.36.
>
> Transition Type or Family
> Transition Subtype
> Transition Direction
> Fade Color
>   
Ah, I read:

"Insert into the list immediately before 15.36.1:" as meaning to insert 
the values at the end of the list that terminates before 15.36.1.

You, on the other hand, are reading it as saying to insert the values in 
the list but we don't say where, which could lead to different listings.

I will suggest to the TC that the language be changed to read:

"Insert at the end of the list located in 15.36 the following values in 
the order shown:"

Would that clarify the instruction?

The "errata" has been approved by OASIS and I am not sure what process 
is open for an errata on an errata document.

Hope you are having a great weekend!

Patrick

-- 
Patrick Durusau
patrick@durusau.net
Chair, V1 - US TAG to JTC 1/SC 34
Convener, JTC 1/SC 34/WG 3 (Topic Maps)
Editor, OpenDocument Format TC (OASIS), Project Editor ISO/IEC 26300
Co-Editor, ISO/IEC 13250-1, 13250-5 (Topic Maps)