Couple comments on specs

["Breininger, Kathryn R" <kathryn.r.breininger@boeing.com>]

Please list my affiliation as The Boeing Company (official name) on both
specs.

I believe the colons in the titles of the specs should be removed.  The
titles in the past versions have not had a colon and subtitle, and make
more sense as complete titles ("ebXML Registry Information Model" and
"ebXML Registry Services and Protocols").  Additionally, these specs
have been referred to RIM and RS, and putting in the colon breaks the
titles in two so these acronyms do not make as much sense (now it would
be S&P and IM?).  In general, you want to avoid subtitles when a
complete title is clear and makes sense.

In RIM document: 
Line 309 - consider changing "object" to "asset" so that this does not
get confused with later references to Registry Objects
Line 330 - sentence starting with "In the following..." needs to be
revised.  Maybe something like: "In the example below, information in
bold is what the reader should be focusing on."
Line 369 - In addition to the RepositoryItems, an ebXML Registry - or is
it Repository?? - is also capable of storing...?  (says in the line
above that RepositoryItems are stored in the repository...)
In several places - "refered" should be "referred".
Line 415 - place the figure before the figure caption, so the caption
appears under the figure.

More later...


Kathryn Breininger
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