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Subject: Re: [soa-rm-ra] SOA RAF Security Section edits
Kevin,
Attached is a markup of the security section. I made edits to substitute terms defined and used (hopefully) consistently in the rest of the document, and made some pure wordsmithing suggestions where I found the text awkward. I had more significant issues with the Identity Propagation section. I captured these in the comment to the section 5.2.5.1 heading and then suggested some wording changes in the remainder of the section.
Happy processing.
Ken
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Dr. Kenneth Laskey
MITRE Corporation, M/S H305 phone: 703-983-7934
7515 Colshire Drive fax: 703-983-1379
McLean VA 22102-7508
From: soa-rm-ra@lists.oasis-open.org [mailto:soa-rm-ra@lists.oasis-open.org] On Behalf Of Kevin Smith
Sent: Monday, July 30, 2012 4:13 PM
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Subject: [soa-rm-ra] SOA RAF Security Section edits
All,
Attached are my edits to the security section, taking a careful look at Michael's comments on the security section and based on our discussion at the last meeting.
Michael - take a look at this and let me know if this looks better..
Thanks,
Kevin
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Security Model-KevinSmith-August4th.docx
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