RE: [tgf-comment] Public review comments for TGF-Exec-Summary-v1.0-cnprd01:2.2 Definition

[Peter F Brown <peter@peterfbrown.com>]

Hi Martin,

As the TC member designated to monitor the comment list during the period of public review of this draft, I can acknowledge that your comment has been received.

It will be addressed and the tabulated comments will be published according to OASIS Technical Committee Process policy.

We will keep you updated and many thanks for your contribution.

Regards,

Peter

 

From: Martin F Smith, BFC Consulting [mailto:bfc.mclean@gmail.com]
Sent: Wednesday, 30 April, 2014 13:59
To: tgf-comment@lists.oasis-open.org
Subject: [tgf-comment] Public review comments for TGF-Exec-Summary-v1.0-cnprd01:2.2 Definition

 

Clarify what's being "transformed."

Not clear from this text:  ". . . making government transformational . . . "

Suggest instead: "transforming government"


Comment type [ technical] ?

Impact [minor] ?