Hi All,
I’ve just read the version of the document commented upon by John.
Here are my initial comments:-
125 "....starting and ending...." ? – Suggest rewording
126 19 patterns? CSFs are [20] – Needs changing to 20 or removing if the number of them could change in the future
194 dependent upon 'Benefits Realisation' ? BTW Should ‘Benefit’ be pluralised throughout? Otherwise, it sound like we onlyget the one of them!
282 Add "or intentionally left blank" ?
309 Replace "MAY" with 'SHOULD" ( to agree with line 735)
313 ??? I don't think this sits well. Following the link to [19]doesn't make it clearer to me.
325 delivery teams
382 no "MAY"
406 This statement may not be true - it needs qualifying
422 dependent upon 'Benefits Realisation' ?
444 Also requires their engagement - ref [Franchise model]? - also see the next pattern
587 'Strategy' ? The pattern is simply "Channel Transformation"
590 {also a general point?} Not 'problemy' enough?
663 Explain the "downside"? Or use standards to embrace and leverage it?
754 - 787 lines are repeated - Remove
Regards
Nig
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From: John Borras [mailto:johnaborras@yahoo.co.uk]
Sent: 06 July 2011 11:30
To: 'TGF TC List '
Subject: RE: [tgf] TGF Pattern Language - Editorial meeting materials
Thanks Peter. Some comments in attached to throw into our discussions later today.
Can we add to the agenda the need to update the Primer and build that into the work plan.
John
From: Peter F Brown [mailto:peter@peterfbrown.com]
Sent: 05 July 2011 20:23
To: TGF TC List
Subject: [tgf] TGF Pattern Language - Editorial meeting materials
Hi all,
As promised, attached are two documents:
- An update of the draft PL – WD03-incomplete – based on comments and additions received since WD02;
- A small spreadsheet summarising where we are, what’s left to do and some outstanding questions to be resolved
Best regards, and talk tomorrow
Peter
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