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Author: DPC Review System (automated)
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| Date:  2013-09-16 | Document: PAS 181

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John Borras / OASIS | 3.2 | | ed | The title of B7 on page 11 is incorrect. | The title should be "Common terminology and reference model" |
John Borras / OASIS | 6 | | ge | The OASIS TGF Technical Committee has just agreed an update to the TGF Pattern on Benefits Realisation. It contains a lot more detail which you might find helpful.  Chris Parker has a copy of the new material and please feel free to use it. | Include new material on Benefits Realisation produced by the OASIS TGF TC. |
John Borras / OASIS | 5.2 | | ge | The Guiding Principles and Stakeholder Engagement sections contain no acknowledgement of the need by Cities to meet national and EC commitments eg green targets, waste re-cycling targets, etc.  These can impact the vision and roadmap and cannot be ignored by citizens and businesses and other third parties if they are looking to help develop services.  We think something about this needs to be said in the B4 Stakeholder Engagement section. | Add to B4 a note about the need for all Stakeholders to be aware of national and EC commitments which can impact the delivery and priority of services. |
John Borras / OASIS | 5.2 | | ge | Guidance Note B3 talks about leadership skills but there is nothing in the SCF comparable to the TGF Pattern 18 on Skills.  That pattern relates to the wider issue of skills shortages within programme teams and we would have thought local authorities suffer from that perhaps more than central government. | Include a new Guidance Note on Skills that aligns to the TGF Pattern 18. |
John Borras / OASIS | Smart city framework - Guidance for decision-makers in smart cities and communities | | ge | We are very pleased to see the close alignment with the OASIS TGF standard and are very glad that our material has been of use to you.  We think the draft SCF is very well constructed and based on our experience of the TGF should provide a useful tool for Smart City managers and decision makers.  There are a couple of areas where we suggest the draft could be improved:1.  Inevitably reading and digesting a lengthy document like the SCF is hard and as the reader gets deeper into the document it becomes less easy to remember the context and position in the overall framework.  This is primarily a design issue and one we are aware of ourselves with the TGF.  2.  It might be helpful to the reader and also help to cement the relationship between the SCF and TGF if for each Guidance Note you included a note informing the reader that additional guidance on this area is available in TGF Pattern number nn. | 1.  Review the design of the SCF and look for ways to improve the understanding and readability perhaps with the inclusion of more sign-posting for each section to the overall framework model.2.  Include in each Guidance Note a cross-reference to the relevant TGF Pattern where additional guidance can be found. |