[OASIS Issue Tracker] Commented: (AMQP-46) Security: Incorporate feedback from Steve Houston's review

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Rafael Schloming commented on AMQP-46:
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Part 5, section 1: "tunneled" should be "carried", or "over" should be
"through" (one carries over and tunnels through). "carried over" is the
more correct one here, in my opinion, as tunneling implies a change in
protocol (tunnel ipv6 through ipv4, for example).

Part 5, section 1, 2nd para, 3rd sentence: Should be "Therefore, section 3
defines the frames necessary for SASL to function."

Part 5, section 1, 2nd para, last sentence: "Connection" should not be
capitalized.

Part 5, section 2, 1st sentence: "tunnel" should be "session". Also, add
"before commencing with TLS negotiation" at end of sentence.

Part 5, section 2, 2nd sentence: initial quote on "AMQP" should be an open
quote.

Part 5, section 2, 2nd para: Replace "TLS tunnel" with "TLS protocol"
Also, remove "Version Negotiation" from reference to section 2.

Part 5, section 2, 4th para, 2nd bullet, 2nd sentence: "differs to" should
be "differs from"

Part 5, section 2, 4th para, 4th bullet: Add comma after "i.e."
Also, "write-half" should be "write half"

Part 5, section 2.1, 1st sentence: "using tunnelling" should be "using the
above procedure"

Part 5, section 2.1, 2nd para, 1st sentence: "tunnel negotiation" should
be "initial TLS-invoking"

Part 5, section 2.1, 2nd para, 2nd sentence: Add comma after "e.g."

Part 5, section 3, 1st sentence: "tunnel" should be "layer"

Part 5, section 3, 2nd sentence: initial quote on "AMQP" should be an open
quote.

Part 5, section 3, 2nd para: "tunnel" should be "layer". Also, remove
"Version Negotiation" from the section 2 reference.

Part 5, section 3.1, 1st sentence: Remove "Framing" from section 3
reference.

Part 5, section 3.1, 2nd para, 3rd sentence: initial quote on "sasl-frame"
should be an open quote.

Part 5, section 3.3.2, hostname, 2nd para, 1st sentence: insert "either"
after "field SHOULD"

> Security: Incorporate feedback from Steve Houston's review
> ----------------------------------------------------------
>
>                 Key: AMQP-46
>                 URL: http://tools.oasis-open.org/issues/browse/AMQP-46
>             Project: OASIS Advanced Message Queuing Protocol (AMQP) TC
>          Issue Type: Improvement
>            Reporter: Rafael Schloming
>            Assignee: Rafael Schloming
>


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