emix emix-over-v1.0-cnprd02

[Mike Douglass <douglm@rpi.edu>]

EMIX Overview Version 1.0
Committee Note Draft 02 /
Public Review Draft 02
14 June 2012


Footnote 2 Page 4:
Separate ownership has not been uniformly required or implementing in 
various jurisdictions;
there are municipalities with a different model.

Change "implementing" to "implemented"


Line 43: Things offered the promise that things houses in -> Things 
offered the promise that things housed in   (change houses to housed)

Line 50: R&D finds -> R&D funds

Line 71: disparate stakeholder can use -> disparate stakeholders can 
use   (missing "s" on stakeholders)

Line 71/72 Perhaps reads better as
disparate stakeholders can use to express to other unrelated parties 
what they have to offer or wish to buy

Line 91: It is enable many activities ->
It enables many activities
or
It is the enabler of many activities


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