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Subject: [OASIS Issue Tracker] Updated: (EMIX-339) Various minor editorialissues
[ http://tools.oasis-open.org/issues/browse/EMIX-339?page=com.atlassian.jira.plugin.system.issuetabpanels:all-tabpanel ] William Cox updated EMIX-339: ----------------------------- Summary: Various minor editorial issues (was: Line 352 Extra line of text should be deleted) Proposal: Actions as listed, or rewrite. (was: Delete line 352.) Description: Line 352 Extra line of text should be deleted -- refers to the present section Line 192 delete "the" Section 2.2 - it's jarring to start out with a lot of TEMIX description, then on line 192 refer to adopting much of the TEMIX terminology. Reorder; also shouldn't be "The Emix TC" rather "This specification uses" and get rid of "throughout this document." Line 192 delete "Taken together," Line 225 and 255 - repetitive. Reconsider with 165-168 - the same point seems to be made three times in three pages. Line 318 "the Product Description and the emixBase" -- why is one in XML token form and the other separate words? Be consisent. Suggest "the Product Description base type and the Emix Base type" 342-344 is clumsy. try "New efforts MAY specify additional...". "...generate new Emix Base..." doesn't sound like English. (see also line 340 and all other uses of "Emix Base" -- which was "emixBase on line 318). "transported on" seems strange given that this is not a message standard. line 348 change "in v1.0" to "this specification" was:352 refers to the present section; should be deleted. > Various minor editorial issues > ------------------------------ > > Key: EMIX-339 > URL: http://tools.oasis-open.org/issues/browse/EMIX-339 > Project: OASIS Energy Market Information Exchange (eMIX) TC > Issue Type: Sub-task > Components: spec > Affects Versions: wd22 > Environment: William Cox > Reporter: William Cox > Assignee: William Cox > Priority: Minor > > Line 352 Extra line of text should be deleted -- refers to the present section > Line 192 delete "the" > Section 2.2 - it's jarring to start out with a lot of TEMIX description, then on line 192 refer to adopting much of the TEMIX terminology. Reorder; also shouldn't be "The Emix TC" rather "This specification uses" and get rid of "throughout this document." > Line 192 delete "Taken together," > Line 225 and 255 - repetitive. Reconsider with 165-168 - the same point seems to be made three times in three pages. > Line 318 "the Product Description and the emixBase" -- why is one in XML token form and the other separate words? Be consisent. Suggest "the Product Description base type and the Emix Base type" > 342-344 is clumsy. try "New efforts MAY specify additional...". "...generate new Emix Base..." doesn't sound like English. (see also line 340 and all other uses of "Emix Base" -- which was "emixBase on line 318). "transported on" seems strange given that this is not a message standard. > line 348 change "in v1.0" to "this specification" -- This message is automatically generated by JIRA. - If you think it was sent incorrectly contact one of the administrators: http://tools.oasis-open.org/issues/secure/Administrators.jspa - For more information on JIRA, see: http://www.atlassian.com/software/jira
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