[OASIS Issue Tracker] Updated: (EMIX-339) Various minor editorialissues

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William Cox updated EMIX-339:
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        Summary: Various minor editorial issues  (was: Line 352 Extra line of text should be deleted)
       Proposal: Actions as listed, or rewrite.  (was: Delete line 352.)
    Description: 
Line 352 Extra line of text should be deleted -- refers to the present section

Line 192 delete "the"

Section 2.2 - it's jarring to start out with a lot of TEMIX description, then on line 192 refer to adopting much of the TEMIX terminology. Reorder; also shouldn't be "The Emix TC" rather "This specification uses" and get rid of "throughout this document."

Line 192 delete "Taken together,"

Line 225 and 255 - repetitive. Reconsider with 165-168 - the same point seems to be made three times in three pages.

Line 318 "the Product Description and the emixBase" -- why is one in XML token form and the other separate words?  Be consisent.  Suggest "the Product Description base type and the Emix Base type"

342-344 is clumsy. try "New efforts MAY specify additional...".  "...generate new Emix Base..." doesn't sound like English. (see also line 340 and all other uses of "Emix Base" -- which was "emixBase on line 318).  "transported on" seems strange given that this is not a message standard. 

line 348 change "in v1.0" to "this specification"



  was:352 refers to the present section; should be deleted.


> Various minor editorial issues
> ------------------------------
>
>                 Key: EMIX-339
>                 URL: http://tools.oasis-open.org/issues/browse/EMIX-339
>             Project: OASIS Energy Market Information Exchange (eMIX) TC
>          Issue Type: Sub-task
>          Components: spec
>    Affects Versions: wd22
>         Environment: William Cox
>            Reporter: William Cox
>            Assignee: William Cox
>            Priority: Minor
>
> Line 352 Extra line of text should be deleted -- refers to the present section
> Line 192 delete "the"
> Section 2.2 - it's jarring to start out with a lot of TEMIX description, then on line 192 refer to adopting much of the TEMIX terminology. Reorder; also shouldn't be "The Emix TC" rather "This specification uses" and get rid of "throughout this document."
> Line 192 delete "Taken together,"
> Line 225 and 255 - repetitive. Reconsider with 165-168 - the same point seems to be made three times in three pages.
> Line 318 "the Product Description and the emixBase" -- why is one in XML token form and the other separate words?  Be consisent.  Suggest "the Product Description base type and the Emix Base type"
> 342-344 is clumsy. try "New efforts MAY specify additional...".  "...generate new Emix Base..." doesn't sound like English. (see also line 340 and all other uses of "Emix Base" -- which was "emixBase on line 318).  "transported on" seems strange given that this is not a message standard. 
> line 348 change "in v1.0" to "this specification"

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