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Subject: [OASIS Issue Tracker] Commented: (EMIX-476) wd32: misc editorial(primarily section 1)
[ http://tools.oasis-open.org/issues/browse/EMIX-476?page=com.atlassian.jira.plugin.system.issuetabpanels:comment-tabpanel&focusedCommentId=26067#action_26067 ] Toby Considine commented on EMIX-476: ------------------------------------- >> Line 152 Content of section 1.5 'Namespace' is repetitive and confused/confusing. Also typos. Would welcome suggestions > wd32: misc editorial (primarily section 1) > ------------------------------------------ > > Key: EMIX-476 > URL: http://tools.oasis-open.org/issues/browse/EMIX-476 > Project: OASIS Energy Market Information Exchange (eMIX) TC > Issue Type: Bug > Environment: Anne Hendry > Reporter: Anne Hendry > Assignee: William Cox > Priority: Minor > Fix For: wd33 > > > General: > Love the compacting of duplicate information! > Love the diagram in section 6-4 (Figure 6-1)! > Is there a way to stop tables from breaking across page boundaries? > This makes it very hard to read and looks unfinished. > Specific: > Line 27 IEC TC57 name (Power systems management ...) Doesn't seem like the correct/full name. > Line 28 Business and market information was borrowed from the financial instruments > Common Information Models as described in International Standards Organization > (ISO) [ISO20022] > What exactly are we 'borrowing' from iso 20022? > I don't see anything that appears to be from that model and > it seems a bit strange to be using two separate 'common information models' > Line 36 An overview of [WS-Calendar] semantics is provided in Appendix E. > Now Appendix C > Line 42 Standard for Interconnecting Distributed Resources with Electric Power Systems > Should this instead be in non-normative references? 'Normative' indicates it > has been included in its entirety into this spec but this was not here until > recently. Where does EMIX incorporate IEEE 1547? > Lines 101 - 125 All these NAESB links take you to a login page, which won't do anyone > any good. Might as well not have the hot links. > Line 127 NIEM in non-normative references. Thought we had agreed to remove mention of NIEM. > Line 130 Add hot link to OpenADR spec > http://openadr.lbl.gov/pdf/cec-500-2009-063.pdf > Line 137 Should this be NAESB PAP03, and how does it relate to line 101? > Lines 145-146 Change 'PAP 03' to 'NIST PAP03'. Replace 'Details can be found at' with > "NIST Priority Action Plan 03, Common Price Communication Model" > http://collaborate.nist.gov/twiki-sggrid/bin/view/SmartGrid/PAP03PriceProduct > or http://www.nist.gov/smartgrid/priority-actions.cfm > Remove 'link retrieved 6/23/2010'. > General Non-normative reference comment: There is NAESB PAP03, NAESB 03, and PAP03 referenced. > Seems somewhat redundant. Can these be merged somehow? > Line 152 Content of section 1.5 'Namespace' is repetitive and confused/confusing. Also typos. > Line 453 Table 3-4 (WS-Calendar defined terms) > duplicates many of the same elements (but with different definitions) as in > Appendix C Table C-1 (WS-Calendar Foundational Semantics) > > One or the other should be removed (or at least duplicate entries removed). > Line 178 (Editorial Conventions) > Strike first sentence. > It raises more questions than answers and not the right place to raise schema rules. > Line 184 Strike sentence > "Each business process will have its own security needs, > including different consequences for failure of security." > It just clutters up the concept which is better communicated with sentences before and after. > Figure 2-1. Concept is not getting across. What does the line represent? > Could it be horizontal? Doesn't seem to necessarily represent the information in > the text above. Would suggest removing for now because, while it is a wonderfully > clean and clear diagram it takes up a lot of room and doesn't yet add to the > understanding of the concepts presented. -- This message is automatically generated by JIRA. - If you think it was sent incorrectly contact one of the administrators: http://tools.oasis-open.org/issues/secure/Administrators.jspa - For more information on JIRA, see: http://www.atlassian.com/software/jira
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