[OASIS Issue Tracker] (MQTT-417) Feedback comments on WD 11 by Stefan

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Stefan Hagen updated MQTT-417:
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    Description: 
Not ready yet (current reading position before line 30).

Nits/Suggestions:

@Abstract lines 26-29:

These characteristics make it ideal for use in many situations, including constrained environments such as for communication in Machine to Machine (M2M) and Internet of Things (IoT) contexts where a small code footprint is required and/or network bandwidth is at a premium.

Suggest to allow or to contain the and case, put examples at the end of the argument and order the former alphabetically, and pull shared term context before the list:

These characteristics make it ideal for use in many situations, including constrained environments where a small code footprint is required or network bandwidth is at a premium, e.g. for communication in the context of Internet of Things (IoT) or Machine to Machine (M2M). 

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Component and JIRA's severity field "priority (shiver)" set in the hopes it will be only editorial and trivial to fix whatever I will find.

To cite Richard's announcement of WD11 ready to review:

The editors have requested that each TC member open one Jira containing their feedback comments. The editors can then process anything editorial, remove duplicates, and bring more substantial issues to the attention of the TC.


  was:
Nothing here yet.

Component and JIRA's severity field "priority (shiver)" set in the hopes it will be only editorial and trivial to fix whatever I will find.

To cite Richards announcement of WD11 ready to review:
The editors have requested that each TC member open one Jira containing their feedback comments. The editors can then process anything editorial, remove duplicates, and bring more substantial issues to the attention of the TC.



> Feedback comments on WD 11 by Stefan
> ------------------------------------
>
>                 Key: MQTT-417
>                 URL: https://issues.oasis-open.org/browse/MQTT-417
>             Project: OASIS Message Queuing Telemetry Transport (MQTT) TC
>          Issue Type: Bug
>          Components: edits
>    Affects Versions: wd11
>            Reporter: Stefan Hagen
>            Assignee: Stefan Hagen
>            Priority: Trivial
>              Labels: editorial
>
> Not ready yet (current reading position before line 30).
> Nits/Suggestions:
> @Abstract lines 26-29:
> These characteristics make it ideal for use in many situations, including constrained environments such as for communication in Machine to Machine (M2M) and Internet of Things (IoT) contexts where a small code footprint is required and/or network bandwidth is at a premium.
> Suggest to allow or to contain the and case, put examples at the end of the argument and order the former alphabetically, and pull shared term context before the list:
> These characteristics make it ideal for use in many situations, including constrained environments where a small code footprint is required or network bandwidth is at a premium, e.g. for communication in the context of Internet of Things (IoT) or Machine to Machine (M2M). 
> # ---
> Component and JIRA's severity field "priority (shiver)" set in the hopes it will be only editorial and trivial to fix whatever I will find.
> To cite Richard's announcement of WD11 ready to review:
> The editors have requested that each TC member open one Jira containing their feedback comments. The editors can then process anything editorial, remove duplicates, and bring more substantial issues to the attention of the TC.



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