Comments to Stateless Packet Filtering

["Brule, Joseph M" <jmbrule@radium.ncsc.mil>]

OpenC2 Technical Committee, 

Suggest the following twenty five administrative changes to the "Open Command and Control (OpenC2) Profile for Stateless Packet Filtering Version 1.0"  Please note that the page and line numbers correspond to the pdf version.  

Respectfully Submitted, 


Joe Brule 


Page(s)/ [Line Number(s)]:  41/ [1]
Suggested Change:  Insert  'Annex D: Acronyms'.  then rename current Annex D and E
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Page(s)/ Line Number(s):  1/ [8]
Suggested Change:  change 'transport' to 'transfer'
Justification:  OpenC2 is payload for application layer, therefore more accurate to define external dependencies at layer 7. 
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Page(s)/ Line Number(s):  7/[19]
Suggested Change: Add non normative references by Willett and Herring
Justification:  Need a reference for the IACD model 
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Page(s)/ Line Number(s):  9/[19-20]
Suggested Change:  Modify to read " and not intended to preclude other means to achieve information assurance, e.g. the use of an... "
Justification:  Clarity
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Page(s)/ Line Number(s):  9/[22-53]
Suggested Change: remove references to the subcommittees in the figure
Justification:  The section addresses scope of the different specifications, the organization of the TC is not relevant in that context
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Page(s)/ Line Number(s):  11/ [11 and 12]
Suggested Change: do not hyphenate stateless packet filtering
Justification:  consistency
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Page(s)/ Line Number(s):  11/ [24]
Suggested Change: replace ACTUATOR-ARGS and COMMAND-ARGS with ARGUMENTS
Justification:  Accuracy and consistency with other specifications 
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Page(s)/ Line Number(s):  11/[41]
Suggested Change: delete repeated 'may'
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Page(s)/ Line Number(s):  11/[46]
Suggested Change: hyphenate nonnormative
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Page(s)/ Line Number(s):  11/[51-53]
Suggested Change: Section Three presents criteria that define conformance.  Conformance assures that products, instances and/or integration are interoperable.
Justification:  clarity
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Page(s)/ Line Number(s):  11/[54, 55]
Suggested Change:  There are five annexes, but only want to highlight the three that facilitate developers. Need to reword.
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Page(s)/ Line Number(s):  13/ [17]
Suggested Change: change 'does not' to 'SHALL NOT'
Justification:  Need to communicate the fact that 'homegrown' actions are not allowed
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Page(s)/ Line Number(s):  13/[20]
Suggested Change: change target-specifiers' to uppercase
Justification:  consistency with conventions in the other specs
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Page(s)/ Line Number(s):  13/[29]
Suggested Change: make 'section 2.3' a live link and will check throughout the document for links
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Page(s)/ Line Number(s):  14/[29]
Suggested Change: the reference to 'section 2.2.6 of Version 1.0....' needs to be updated
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Page(s)/ Line Number(s):  16/[19]
Suggested Change:  change the second bullet to read 'the value MUST map to exactly one deny <target> or allow <target> for a given instance of an SLPF'
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Page(s)/ Line Number(s):  16/[21]
Suggested Change: change to 'Entities that receive but do not support directionality ...'
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Page(s)/ Line Number(s):  18/[10]
Suggested Change: change identify to identifies and change present to presents  
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Page(s)/ Line Number(s):  20/[48]
Suggested Change: change 'query openc2' to 'query features' and perform a global search to check for other locations
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Page(s)/ Line Number(s):  21/[38]
Suggested Change:  delete space in restart/ reboot and will do a global find replace '/ ' with '/'
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Page(s)/ Line Number(s):  23/[40-45]
Suggested Change:  formatting was lost in the translation to pdf
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Page(s)/ Line Number(s):  24/[12]
Suggested Change:  delete 'the' in 'Profile for basic Stateless...'
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Page(s)/ Line Number(s):  All conformance clauses
Suggested Change: formatting was lost in the translation to pdf.  
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Page(s)/ Line Number(s):  25/[12 and 34]
Suggested Change:  'which identify underlying protocols such that an authenticated ...' (delete word transfer)
Justification:  Transfer specs might identify more than the transfer layer itself
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Page(s)/ Line Number(s):  31/[47]
Suggested Change:  'Optional status text is ignored by the openc2 producer, but may be added to'
Justification:  Highlights that status text is for logging/ debug, but not appropriate for purposes of command and control
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