RE: PbD spec - section 2 revisions

[Kim Cameron <kcameron@microsoft.com>]

Fred – I don’t know what documents Dawn is talking about.  Can you send out the links?

 

From: pbd-se@lists.oasis-open.org [mailto:pbd-se@lists.oasis-open.org] On Behalf Of Fred Carter
Sent: Wednesday, June 18, 2014 3:38 PM
To: 'Dawn Jutla'; 'pbd-se@lists.oasis-open.org'
Cc: Michelle Chibba; David Weinkauf
Subject: [pbd-se] PbD spec - section 2 revisions

 

Hi Dawn,

I added section 2 (with all members’ comments) to your WD R04 and re-uploaded

Unfortunately, the revisions do not survive cutting-and-pasting.

Among the general changes:

·        Strengthened the 7 principles’ descriptions/requirements, but softened the sub-principles’ requirements

·        Trimmed redundant PbD text, re-organized headings and sub-headings accordingly

·        Made terms more precise and consistent terms, e.g. PbD principles, users/data subjects, personal data, compliance.

They are attached for interested TC members.

Thx, Fred

 

 

From: Fred Carter
Sent: Tuesday, June 17, 2014 10:15 AM
To: 'Dawn Jutla'
Cc: pbd-se@lists.oasis-open.org; Michelle Chibba; David Weinkauf
Subject: RE: pbd spec

 

Dawn,

Yes I will follow your lead and prepare Section 2 and 4.1 in similar manner for tomorrow’s TC call.

Thx, Fred

 

From: Dawn Jutla [mailto:dawn.jutla@gmail.com]
Sent: Monday, June 16, 2014 8:19 PM
To: Fred Carter
Cc: pbd-se@lists.oasis-open.org; Michelle Chibba; David Weinkauf
Subject: Re: pbd spec v1r1 - Fred's revisions

 

Hi everyone:

 

In order for us to compose a Master document once more that we may vote on for a CSD, this is a heads up that I am incorporating all 7 sets of recent TC edits section by section (except for Section 2). For example in section 1, I have accepted most of the TC edits with just a few questions. I am listing a few questions at the end of each section when I have not addressed an edit, and/or reasons for rejecting them which the TC can discuss. I will upload the sections of the document to Kavi by tomorrow afternoon. As well as a complete document. 

 

Fred: will you be doing something similar for section 2 and the sub-principles of Table 4.1 with the TC edits or suggestions? <snip>

 

Looking forward to a long discussion on Wednesday.

 

Best,

Dawn.

 

On Mon, Jun 16, 2014 at 4:38 PM, Fred Carter <Fred.Carter@ipc.on.ca> wrote:

Attached are some additional suggested edits to section 2 and 4, including:

1.       Revision to text of introduction and section 1.5 (definition of personal data)

2.       Minor tweaks to wording of section 2 and 4

3.       Added new Section 6: Conformance

These suggested edits will be included in the master chart.

Thx, Fred