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Subject: RE: PbD spec - section 2 revisions
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From: Kim Cameron [mailto:kcameron@microsoft.com]
Fred – I don’t know what documents Dawn is talking about. Can you send out the links? From:
pbd-se@lists.oasis-open.org [mailto:pbd-se@lists.oasis-open.org]
On Behalf Of Fred Carter Hi Dawn, I added section 2 (with all members’ comments) to your WD R04 and re-uploaded Unfortunately, the revisions do not survive cutting-and-pasting.
Among the general changes: ·
Strengthened the 7 principles’ descriptions/requirements, but softened the sub-principles’ requirements
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Trimmed redundant PbD text, re-organized headings and sub-headings accordingly ·
Made terms more precise and consistent terms, e.g. PbD principles, users/data subjects, personal data, compliance. They are attached for interested TC members. Thx, Fred From: Fred Carter
Dawn, Yes I will follow your lead and prepare Section 2 and 4.1 in similar manner for tomorrow’s TC call. Thx, Fred From: Dawn Jutla [mailto:dawn.jutla@gmail.com]
Hi everyone: In order for us to compose a Master document once more that we may vote on for a CSD, this is a heads up that I am incorporating all 7 sets of recent TC edits section by section (except for Section 2). For example in section 1, I have accepted
most of the TC edits with just a few questions. I am listing a few questions at the end of each section when I have not addressed an edit, and/or reasons for rejecting them which the TC can discuss. I will upload the sections of the document to Kavi by tomorrow
afternoon. As well as a complete document. Fred: will you be doing something similar for section 2 and the sub-principles of Table 4.1 with the TC edits or suggestions?
<snip> Looking forward to a long discussion on Wednesday. Best, Dawn. On Mon, Jun 16, 2014 at 4:38 PM, Fred Carter <Fred.Carter@ipc.on.ca> wrote: Attached are some additional suggested edits to section 2 and 4, including: 1.
Revision to text of introduction and section 1.5 (definition of personal data) 2.
Minor tweaks to wording of section 2 and 4
3.
Added new Section 6: Conformance These suggested edits will be included in the master chart. Thx, Fred |
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