Comment on 2.1 in updated draft

[<frederick.hirsch@nokia.com>]

Dawn

I took a look at the  "Privacy by Design Documentation for Software Engineers Version 1.0” Working Draft 05 that you distributed (pbd-se-v1_0-wd05.docx).

My primary concern, which I noted on the call and in an earlier email, is how to make this specification practical and useful in cases where it is possible to comply with some but not all of the normative statements.

I believe you addressed my concern by suggesting we might develop a profile or conformance levels as a next step. This is a reasonable approach.

For others who might not easily see it, I quote your Word comment:

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In a next version (in Fall perhaps as people break for summer), I am suggesting that the TC does work to provide levels of conformance 
so that software organizations can select what subset of PbD principles it reasonably seeks to demonstrate compliance to.  We may 
place language in this section to signal such intent.

]]

I also have some nit suggestions that I mentioned earlier that we remove the bullets on future possible work (delete last two bullets in 1.4) and coalesce definitions that are the same in the document (Personal Data/ Personally Identifiable Information (PII)).

Frank may have more to add, but I believe he may be traveling. I am not aware of any other specific concerns, but seeing the document before a vote is helpful.

Thanks

regards, Frederick

Frederick Hirsch, Nokia
@fjhirsch



On Jun 18, 2014, at 8:45 PM, ext Dawn Jutla <dawn.jutla@gmail.com> wrote:

> Submitter's message
> The PbD-SE Annex Version 1 is attached as a Committee Note. As a reminder, the slimmed down specification is currently available in Kavi as Working Document Revision 5. Together these two documents form our TC work to date.
> 
> Looking forward to receiving Frank and Frederick's input on Table 2.1 in the Working Draft and to its Conformance Section in upcoming days. 
> 
> Cheers, Dawn. 
> -- Dr. Dawn Jutla
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