Mostly +1 there, Dave. One more pass at the syntax from me. Any
comments Dave or anyone?
“SAF is a catalog-based, XML knowledge framework that
enables both problem remediation and optimization of the operational and
business characteristics of complex systems. The framework has applicability to
both IT and non-IT domains; including cloud computing, service management,
governance, security, and most vertical industries.”
Thanks,
Paul
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Paul,
I like it, but we haven't removed the academic tone yet. To
this end, I think we could loose a few words here and there don't contribute
much information. How's this look:
“SAF is a catalog-based, XML knowledge framework that
enables both problem remediation and optimization of both operational or
business characteristics of complex systems. The framework has applicability to
both IT and non-IT domains; including cloud computing, service management,
governance, security, and most vertical industries.”
Thoughts?
On 25 Jan 2010, at 16:56, Lipton, Paul C wrote:
Hi all,
I think we need to do a better job marketing SAF. I’ve
noticed that we tend to have fairly long, academic descriptions of SAF (at
least as far as I can tell), so I took a crack at a simple 2 sentence
description. Please feel free to comment or use as you see fit:
“SAF is a catalog-based, loosely-coupled XML-based
knowledge framework that enables both problem remediation and optimization of
the operational or business characteristics of complex systems within and
across domains of best practices and policy. The framework has applicability to
both IT and non-IT; including cloud computing, operational and service
management, governance, security, and most vertical industries.”
Regards,
Paul
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