From: Julia McCarthy [mailto:julia@us.ibm.com]
Sent: Friday, March 03, 2006 7:43 AM
To: Patton, John H
Cc: Robert Dickau; sdd@lists.oasis-open.org
Subject: RE: [sdd] 2.1.1.6
I think that in this case the requirements in the two sentence are not
separate. Specifying requirements is a subset of specifying information
required for rollback and undo. I like Robert's wording best.
Julia
McCarthy
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"Patton, John H"
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From: Robert Dickau [mailto:rdickau@macrovision.com]
Sent: Thursday, March 02, 2006 1:53 PM
To: Julia McCarthy
Cc: sdd@lists.oasis-open.org
Subject: RE: [sdd] 2.1.1.6
A vote for Option 2, possibly combining into a single sentence (to avoid construction "This includes..."):
The SDD specification must support definition of information required by a provisioning application or installation program to perform rollback and undo operations, including information about requirements that must be met prior to performing these operations.
[Patton, John H] I agree with the rewrite here a bit more than the 2 separate sentences. Although, where I split a requirement into 2 sentences, I envisioned them as separate, but related, requirements.
-jp
From: Julia McCarthy [mailto:julia@us.ibm.com]
Sent: Thursday, 02 March 2006 11:02 am
To: sdd@lists.oasis-open.org
Subject: [sdd] 2.1.1.6
John has done some extensive rewording which he
sent to us in a separate note. I'm going to start pulling those requirements
out one at a time for discussion. Please try to respond - even just to say you
agree.
Starting
with 2.1.1.6. Here's John's suggested rewrite:
Option 1) 2.1.1.6 The SDD
specification must support the ability for the author to define the
requirements that must be met for a provisioning application or installation
program to rollback or undo a deployment lifecycle operation. The SDD
specification must support the ability for the author to define information
needed for a provisioning application or installation program to rollback or
undo a deployment lifecycle operation.
Here's my additional wordsmithing based both on our
discussion about phrasing and just my own idea of what makes a sentence
understandable. I believe that this stays true to the meaning of John's
rewrite.
Option 2) 2.1.1.6
The SDD specification must support definition of information required by a
provisioning application or installation program to perform rollback and undo
lifecycle operations. This includes information about requirements that must
be met prior to performing these operations.
Please vote for option 1 or option 2, or propose an alternative
along with providing your reasons for suggesting an alternative.
Julia
McCarthy
Autonomic Computing Enablement
julia@us.ibm.com
Tie/Line
349/8156
877-261-0391