Regards,
Debra
From: Robert
Dickau [mailto:rdickau@macrovision.com]
Sent: Thursday, March 02, 2006
2:53 PM
To: Julia McCarthy
Cc: sdd@lists.oasis-open.org
Subject: RE: [sdd] 2.1.1.6
A vote
for Option 2, possibly combining into a single sentence (to avoid construction
"This includes..."):
The SDD
specification must support definition of information required by a provisioning
application or installation program to perform rollback and undo operations,
including information about requirements that must be met prior to performing
these operations.
From: Julia
McCarthy [mailto:julia@us.ibm.com]
Sent: Thursday, 02 March 2006
11:02 am
To: sdd@lists.oasis-open.org
Subject: [sdd] 2.1.1.6
John has done some extensive rewording which he sent
to us in a separate note. I'm going to start pulling those requirements out one
at a time for discussion. Please try to respond - even just to say you agree.
Starting with 2.1.1.6. Here's
John's suggested rewrite:
Option 1) 2.1.1.6 The SDD
specification must support the ability for the author to define the
requirements that must be met for a provisioning application or installation
program to rollback or undo a deployment lifecycle operation. The SDD
specification must support the ability for the author to define information
needed for a provisioning application or installation program to rollback or
undo a deployment lifecycle operation.
Here's my additional
wordsmithing based both on our discussion about phrasing and just my own idea
of what makes a sentence understandable. I believe that this stays true to the
meaning of John's rewrite.
Option 2) 2.1.1.6 The SDD specification must support
definition of information required by a provisioning application or
installation program to perform rollback and undo lifecycle operations. This
includes information about requirements that must be met prior to performing
these operations.
Please vote for option 1 or option 2, or propose an alternative along with providing
your reasons for suggesting an alternative.
Julia McCarthy
Autonomic Computing Enablement
julia@us.ibm.com
Tie/Line 349/8156
877-261-0391