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Subject: RE: [sdd] 2.10.2
- From: "Robert Dickau" <rdickau@macrovision.com>
- To: "Julia McCarthy" <julia@us.ibm.com>
- Date: Fri, 3 Mar 2006 10:50:01 -0600
My tinkering isn't intended to change the
meaning of the rewrite. For the first suggestion, I
just find the phrasing "must support defining requirements" a little less
easy to read than "must support definition of
requirements".
(Unendearing writerly nitpicking
follows.)
As for the second suggestion,
John's phrasing---
"requirements for
deploying solution resources to and configuring resources in
distributed [...] locations"
---seems to be shorthand
for---
"requirements for
deploying solution resources to distributed locations and configuring resources
in distributed locations."
My comment is
just that "to and" came as a surprise when parsing the
sentence. My
first impulse is to put
commas or em dashes or parentheses around "and configuring resources in", and
the suggestion I sent tries to sidestep the extra
punctuation.
Robert, could you be more explicit about your suggestion?
Julia
McCarthy
Autonomic Computing Enablement
julia@us.ibm.com
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"Robert Dickau"
<rdickau@macrovision.com>
"Robert Dickau"
<rdickau@macrovision.com>
03/03/2006 10:50 AM |
|
Agreed that this suggestion is an
improvement over mushy "must support the ability for the author to define
specify [sic] a means to...".
Further
tinkering ("defining"-->"definition of", trying to avoid tricky-to-parse
"deploying...to and configuring...in"):
2.10.2
The SDD specification must support
definition of requirements for deploying and configuring solution resources even
across distributed and administratively separate locations.
From: Patton, John H [mailto:John.Patton@ca.com]
Sent: Thursday, 02 March 2006 8:03
pm
To:
sdd@lists.oasis-open.org
Subject: [sdd] 2.10.2
Original
2.10.2
The SDD specification must support the ability for the author to
define specify a means to acquire external requirements even if they reside in
distributed and administratively separated locations.
My suggestion
2.10.2
The SDD specification must support
defining requirements for deploying solution resources to and configuring
resources in distributed and administratively separate
locations.
I think this
satisfies UC 151 a bit more.
cheers,
/john
patton/
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