Editorial comments on draft-sstc-saml-spec-00

["Eve L. Maler" <eve.maler@east.sun.com>]

The numbers below refer to lines.  I hope to provide more comments on the 
Glossary (some substantive, but mostly editorial) in the next couple of 
days.  I had lots of comments on the XML syntax, but suspect that it's 
better to wait on these until we settle more design stuff.

	Eve




61: Outsiders must use security-services-comment list

109: s/document/type of model/

115: Should "resource" be "system resource"?

117ff: Remove abridged glossary here

176: Add "of" before "the meanings"

178: Change comma to semicolon

181: s/describe/describing/

242: Use " http://www.w3.org/2001/XMLSchema"

245: I will talk to someone about how OASIS assigns these

709ff: Remove abridged glossary here

718, 722: Possibly define these in Glossary

734: Possibly define "root" in Glossary

806ff: Discuss registration/profiling templates

899ff: Is this related to the enveloped/ing and extension issues?

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Eve Maler                                             +1 781 442 3190
Sun Microsystems XML Technology Development  eve.maler @ east.sun.com