RE: [soa-eerp] I028: BSLA: Various Editorial 1

["eerp_sy@changfeng.org.cn" <eerp_sy@changfeng.org.cn>]

SOA-EERP BusinessServiceLevelAgreement v1.0 spec working draft 05 (WD05) 
is uploaded at:
http://www.oasis-open.org/committees/download.php/33073/BusinessServiceLevel
Agreement-v1.0-spec-wd05.pdf 

Fixed the issue same as I026. 

This issue should be closed. 


Szu Chang

Original Message:
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From: eerp_sy@changfeng.org.cn eerp_sy@changfeng.org.cn
Date: Sun, 21 Jun 2009 00:33:47 -0400
To: wtcox@coxsoftwarearchitects.com, soa-eerp@lists.oasis-open.org
Subject: [soa-eerp] I028: BSLA:  Various Editorial 1


Issue # I028 

For BSLA Spec only. 

Relate issue are: I026 and I027. 

Original Message:
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From: William Cox wtcox@CoxSoftwareArchitects.com
Date: Sat, 20 Jun 2009 20:52:17 -0400
To: soa-eerp@lists.oasis-open.org
Subject: [soa-eerp] NEW Issue: Various Editorial 1


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Protocol: bqos / rating / sla /

Artifact: spec

Type: editorial

Title: Various Editorial 1

Description:

These editorial corrections are referenced to 
http://www.oasis-open.org/committees/download.php/32576/BusinessQualityOfSer
vice-v1.0-spec-wd04.pdf 
but apply to all three specifications; line numbers are in BQOS. 

(1) Change "Bill Cox" to "William Cox" wherever it occurs, under 
"Chairs" and line 457.

(2) Remove extra blank lines between paragraphs--the template style 
spaces between paragraphs. For example, after all other changes are 
completed remove lines 49, 59,  65, 71, 73, 76, etc.

(3) Under related work on title page delete " as a set." This is redundant.

(4) Change abstract on title page to "This document specifies the XML 
vocabulary for business quality of service (bQoS), one of three 
specifications for end-to-end resource planning (EERP). Business quality 
of service describes the business-related characteristics or attributes 
of a service."  Similar for the other two specifications.

(5) Structure documents per the current OASIS specification template at 
http://docs.oasis-open.org/templates/OASISSpecificationTemplateV3.2.dot 
. Some issues are the order of the start, e.g., The brief introduction 
is followed by 1.1 Terminology then 1.2 Normative References, and so 
forth. See, for example, 
http://docs.oasis-open.org/ebxml-msg/ebms/v3.0/profiles/200707/AS4-profile-c
d-01.pdf

(6) Line 25 delete.

(7) List of participants - I'll have to check in detail.  Eliminate 
commas after each name.

Related issues:

Proposed Resolution:

Correct as indicated.

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*William Cox*
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