Re: [soa-eerp] I031: BSLAVarious Editorial 2

[William Cox <wtcox@CoxSoftwareArchitects.com>]

NOT OK to close -- at least items 3 and 5 have not been addressed. 
Futher review required. Item 5 is critical as we move to public review.

bill cox


eerp_sy@changfeng.org.cn wrote:
> SOA-EERP BusinessServiceLevelAgreement v1.0 spec working draft 05 (WD05) 
> is uploaded at:
> http://www.oasis-open.org/committees/download.php/33073/BusinessServiceLevel
> Agreement-v1.0-spec-wd05.pdf
>
> The issue is fixed and can be closed. 
>
>
> Szu Chang
>
> Original Message:
> -----------------
> From: eerp_sy@changfeng.org.cn eerp_sy@changfeng.org.cn
> Date: Sun, 21 Jun 2009 00:41:55 -0400
> To: wtcox@coxsoftwarearchitects.com, soa-eerp@lists.oasis-open.org
> Subject: [soa-eerp] I031: BSLAVarious Editorial 2
>
>
> Issue # I031 
>
> For BSLA Spec only. 
>
> Relate issue are: I028, I029 and I030. 
>
> Original Message:
> -----------------
> From: William Cox wtcox@CoxSoftwareArchitects.com
> Date: Sat, 20 Jun 2009 21:06:48 -0400
> To: soa-eerp@lists.oasis-open.org
> Subject: [soa-eerp] NEW Issue: Various Editorial 2
>
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> Protocol: bqos / rating / sla / others
>
> Artifact: spec
>
> Type: editorial
>
> Title: Various Editorial 2
>
> Description:
>
> These editorial corrections are referenced to 
> http://www.oasis-open.org/committees/download.php/32576/BusinessQualityOfSer
> vice-v1.0-spec-wd04.pdf  
> but apply to all three specifications; line numbers are in BQOS. 
>
> (1) First two lines of Status on title page should be deleted.
>
> (2) Rewrite Introduction. Suggested text:
> "This documnent is the specification for Business Quality of Service for 
> End-to-End Resource planning, an XML vocabuly by which a business 
> application may communicate selected characteristics of the service it 
> provides."  The suggested text applies to BQOS; similar text will be 
> suggested in other issues for the rating and sla.
>
> (3) A longer introduction describing EERP in general, and relating the 
> three specifications, would be desirable in all three documents.
>
> (4) Delete "All text is normative unless otherwise indicated." This is 
> in square brackets in the specification template at 
> http://docs.oasis-open.org/templates/OASISSpecificationTemplateV3.2.dot 
> and should not appear in the final document.
>
> (5) Section 1.1, namespaces, should be after Non-Normative references at 
> the start of Section 2.
>
> (6) In BQOS line 66-67 change "standard" to "specification" and change 
> "model, and bQoS should" to "model. bQoS should".
>
> (7) Generally for section headings in all of the specification (see in 
> BQOS lines 150, 205, 311)  make the section heading the same as the 
> element type, e.g. line 150 in BQOS should read "BQoSPrice" with no spaces.
>
> Related issues:
> Number not assigned: Various Editorial 1
>
> Proposed Resolution:
>
> Correct as indicated.
>
>
> bill cox
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