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Subject: RE: [soa-rm] 08 draft publicly available
As promised, I've done an extensive proof read from beginning through to line 519. A few comments: - Acrobat is not a word-processor, sorry guys but it doesn't cut the mustard for clear and detailed editing, even if I respect that Matt needs to retail referential integrity over the version. So the document might look a bit messy in places and difficult to read; - There are a few sticky note comments on a small number of phrases that I don't understand and may, thus, not be understood by a wider audience: Frank, in particular, take a butcher's; - Although there are still a couple of things I personally disagree with, I've tried not to change the sense of any part, at least not intentionally ;-) - I've completely reworded Ken's electricity utility example in 2.2.2.5: it's such a good analogy, I've proposed a re-wording that hopefully gets it across well: there is a sting in the tail, with the addition at the end of the paragraph when stating that hardwiring would be a different service - I go out on a limb by adding that "this would not be an SOA" - shoot me as appropriate. I will try to find time to do lines 520 to 692, but can't promise when - so if anyone else wants a bash...and, Prasanta: get well soon... Peter -----Original Message----- From: Matt MacKenzie [mailto:mattm@adobe.com] Sent: 15 September 2005 01:56 To: Duane Nickull; Brown, Al; Ken Laskey; SOA-RM Subject: RE: [soa-rm] 08 draft publicly available Who is the proofreading team? They are a set of volunteers who signed up for this task at or around the last f2f. There are only a few of them, and that's all we really need. These individuals include Michael Stiefel, Al Brown and ?... (I forget the rest. You know who you are!) Q&A ---- 1. Q: I'm not on the proofreading team. Should I wait to submit issues? A: No. Please submit your issues against 08, just don't submit grammar and spelling issues. The proofreading team's goal is to cut down the obvious, non-contentious stuff. 2. Q: Why is the proofreading team proofreading during general TC review, instead of prior to? A: This has happened because we, mostly me, were too busy to remember to do it the right way ;-) Uhh, sorry :-) 3. Q: So I believe I am a proofreader. How do I make my comments? A: The attached document has been "reader enabled", which means commenting features within Acrobat Reader software which are normally only available to Acrobat Standard/Professional users will be enabled for this document. Just use the commenting tools (notes, text replacement, strike out, etc.), save the document with your comments, and... 4. Q: Who do I send my commented document to? A: Send it to mattm@adobe, who will handle whatever else needs to happen. 5. Q: Hey, this Adobe commenting / reader enablement stuff is cool. Do you have server products that I can buy that would allow me to do interesting things with those features? A: Yes, ask me for details :-) Ok, that's an obvious plug, I hope you can forgive me! -Matt Please use the Acrobat commenting features to indicate text changes that are not substantial, e.g. grammar, spelling, voice (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Passive_voice), etc. -----Original Message----- From: Duane Nickull Sent: Wednesday, September 14, 2005 7:28 PM To: Matt MacKenzie; Brown, Al; Ken Laskey; SOA-RM Subject: RE: [soa-rm] 08 draft publicly available Should the proof readers use the commenting template or just use sticky notes? Duane -----Original Message----- From: Matt MacKenzie [mailto:mattm@adobe.com] Sent: Wednesday, September 14, 2005 2:42 PM To: Brown, Al; Ken Laskey; SOA-RM Subject: RE: [soa-rm] 08 draft publicly available Oops. We forgot about the proof readers. Yes, if you guys can give a run through looking for grammatical stuff and send comments directly to myself or Frank, we will incorporate those changes and rev the draft outside of the issues process. -matt -----Original Message----- From: Brown, Al [mailto:abrown@filenet.com] Sent: Wednesday, September 14, 2005 5:12 PM To: Ken Laskey; SOA-RM Subject: RE: [soa-rm] 08 draft publicly available Hi. I have not checked out this draft yet, so I apologize if this is already covered there. On this draft, when will it enter the proof-reading phase? Do you still need proof-readers? And lastly, when will we be able to open issues against it? Regards, -Al -----Original Message----- From: Ken Laskey [mailto:klaskey@mitre.org] Sent: Tuesday, September 13, 2005 2:09 PM To: SOA-RM Subject: RE: [soa-rm] 08 draft publicly available Sorry for the fuss. I probably have several people I should send copies to. Ken At 04:39 PM 9/13/2005, Duane Nickull wrote: >Oui Monsieur! > >It is written that it is an editors draft. Actual mileage may vary. > >Duane > >-----Original Message----- >From: Chiusano Joseph [mailto:chiusano_joseph@bah.com] >Sent: Tuesday, September 13, 2005 11:53 AM >To: SOA-RM >Subject: RE: [soa-rm] 08 draft publicly available > >My understanding is that all drafts are supposed to be publicly >available, per OASIS policy. But Duane and/or Jamie can confirm for us. > >Joe > >Joseph Chiusano >Booz Allen Hamilton >O: 703-902-6923 >C: 202-251-0731 >Visit us online@ http://www.boozallen.com > > > > -----Original Message----- > > From: Ken Laskey [mailto:klaskey@mitre.org] > > Sent: Tuesday, September 13, 2005 2:17 PM > > To: SOA-RM > > Subject: [soa-rm] 08 draft publicly available > > > > Someone sent me the following > > > > Reference Model for Service Oriented Architectures. > > by > > OASIS SOA Reference Model TC, Working Draft 08 > > > > This Service Oriented Architecture Reference Model is an abstract > > framework for understanding significant entities and relationships > > amongst them within a service-oriented environment, and for the > > development of consistent standards or specifications supporting > > that environment. It is based on unifying concepts of SOA and may be > > used by architects developing specific services oriented > > architectures or for education and explaining SOA. A reference model > > is not directly tied to any standards, technologies or other > > concrete implementation details, but it does seek to provide a > > common semantics that can be used unambiguously across and between > > different implementations. > > http://xml.coverpages.org/soa.html#SOA-RM-WD08 > > http://xml.coverpages.org/SOA-RM-WD08.pdf > > http://www.oasis-open.org/committees/soa-rm/ > > > > where the pdf link is our 08 draft. I was under the impression that > > we were not supposed to be handing out draft that were not intended > > for public review. Am I mistaken? > > > > Ken > > > > -- > > > > -------------------------------------------------------------- > > ------------------- > > / Ken > > Laskey > > \ > > | MITRE Corporation, M/S H305 phone: 703-983-7934 | > > | 7515 Colshire Drive fax: > > 703-983-1379 | > > \ McLean VA 22102-7508 > > / > > > > -------------------------------------------------------------- > > -------------------- > > > > > > > > -- ------------------------------------------------------------------------ --------- / Ken Laskey \ | MITRE Corporation, M/S H305 phone: 703-983-7934 | | 7515 Colshire Drive fax: 703-983-1379 | \ McLean VA 22102-7508 / ------------------------------------------------------------------------ ----------
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