RE: [soa-rm] Groups - Editor's draft of PR2 (soa-rm pr2 changes.pdf) - A Couple of Grammer Corrections

[Danny Thornton <danny_thornton2@yahoo.com>]

Line 185 
Add a comma after create
... expertise to create maintain, and

should be

... expertise to create, maintain, and

Line 253
An object exposes structure but no way to ...

should be

An object exposes structure but has no way to ...


--- Duane Nickull <dnickull@adobe.com> wrote:

> Frank:
> 
> Looks great!  Minor fixes:
> 
> Line 105-107 and 112-119 seem to have duplicate
> sentences.
> 
> Line 210 - "W" is capitalized in web services - not
> sure why since "S"
> is not. This is consistent with other uses of the
> term.
> 
> Document Date should be May 23?
> 
> As soon as you reply I'll get the ballot set up.
> 
> Duane
> 
> 
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> -----Original Message-----
> From: frank.mccabe@us.fujitsu.com
> [mailto:frank.mccabe@us.fujitsu.com] 
> Sent: Tuesday, May 23, 2006 5:10 PM
> To: soa-rm@lists.oasis-open.org
> Subject: [soa-rm] Groups - Editor's draft of PR2
> (soa-rm pr2
> changes.pdf) uploaded
> 
> Second revision of the editor's draft of PR2
> 
>  -- Dr. Francis McCabe
> 
> The document revision named Editor's draft of PR2
> (soa-rm pr2
> changes.pdf)
> has been submitted by Dr. Francis McCabe to the
> OASIS SOA Reference
> Model
> TC document repository.  This document is revision
> #1 of soa-rm pr2
> changes.pdf.
> 
> Document Description:
> This is an editor's draft of the second Public
> Review of the RM v. 1
> This has markup to highlight the differences between
> this version and
> PR1.
> 
> View Document Details:
>
http://www.oasis-open.org/apps/org/workgroup/soa-rm/document.php?documen
> t_id=18346
> 
> Download Document:  
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> oa-rm%20pr2%20changes.pdf
> 
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