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From: Chris Parker
[mailto:chris.parker@cstransform.com]
Sent: 17 March 2011 17:26
To: peter@peterfbrown.com; TGF TC List
Subject: RE: [tgf] Today's motion to approve Working Draft 02
Here is my suggested draft to
meet Trond’s point:
“Over recent years, several
governments have published a wide range of Policy Products as part of
their work on Interoperability
Frameworks and Enterprise Architectures, and there is significant good practice
in these which other governments are
able to draw on these as
reference models when developing their own Policy Products.
However, we believe that no
government has yet set out a full framework of the Policy Products required to
ensure that a holistic, government -
wide vision for transformation
can be delivered is much broader than is currently being addressed in
most Interoperability Frameworks and Enterprise
Architectures.”
Chris Parker
Managing Partner, CS Transform Ltd, +44 7951 754 060
From: Peter F Brown
[mailto:peter@peterfbrown.com]
Sent: 17 March 2011 16:59
To: TGF TC List
Subject: [tgf] Today's motion to approve Working Draft 02
Hi:
We are due to discuss and vote on approving TGF Primer
Working Draft 02 as a formal Committee Note Draft.
There have been no substantial new comments or issues
raised, but only a small number of editorial changes, that have been mentioned
on the list.
To clarify therefore, I would like us to vote to approve
v2 with the following changes:
Lines 241 and 275 – CSF diagram updated from ‘Do-Ability’ to
‘Achievable Delivery’;
Lines 432 and 1332 – change ‘Channel Management’ to ‘Channel
Transformation’;
Line 1210 – remove line and comment regarding reference to
IDM standards;
Line 1301 – change ‘Web 2.0 technologies’ to ‘technologies’;
Add names of editors;
Add names of TC members to list in Acknowledgements,
and that the duly modified draft be assigned v3 and
submitted to TC Admin for approval…
Talk soon!
Regards,
Peter
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