RE: [tgf] Comments on Business Case

Thanks to Colin and Nig for their comments. Can I have any other views please by close of play on Wednesday 25^th May. I’d like to hear views on the general approach as well as detailed textual changes.

This will be an important part of our publicity and thus we need to ensure we get the basic messages correctly focused, so please take a few minutes to review it and share your opinions.

Regards

John Borras

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From: Greenaway Nigel [mailto:Nig.Greenaway@uk.fujitsu.com]
Sent: 20 May 2011 16:18
To: John Borras
Cc: TGF TC List
Subject: [tgf] Comments on Business Case

Hi John,

As discussed yesterday, and based on feedback from Government practitioners, I have tried to reword parts of the business case. So that everyone can see the changes and so that I can insert a few comments, I have copied some of the text into a word document and used marked changes. I follow this with the clear text that would result from adopting those changes to facilitate understanding and reviews by others.

The basic premise that I have used in deriving these comments is that we need to be less overtly critical of e-Government projects/programmes as :-

1. To dismiss all e-Government activity as failing will upset many practitioners and make it personally impossible for them to share and promote TGF with their bosses/customers

2. There are successes in the field – this is where we are picking up and sharing good practice and experience from.

3. Time has moved on and there are new capabilities available due to technology changes, lessons having been learnt and experience showing that good practice can be transferred from wherever it originates into a large number of other situations

4. A general maturation of Government ICT and the policies required by government organisations is taking place (IMO).

I also have some comments further to those in the marked up document.:-

1. I don’t think we need to date to be so prominent. I suggest a version and audience description (as discussed yesterday) would be better. The audiences can be derived from the TGF audiences and would enable us to empathise more closely with their respective viewpoints.

2. Page 2 Title – “Why TGF?” I suggest retitling this (taking K’s point that frameworks rise a fall over time) as “Why a new framework?”

3. Page 3 Title I suggest changing this to “The Evolution of TGF from e-Government”

4. Page 4 I suggest retitling simply as “The TGF” and changing the some of the numbered points to flow a little better(see marked up document)

And now the detail:-

<<20110520 - TGF Business Case (NG Comments).docx>>

Regards

Nig

Nig Greenaway

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