Hi All,
I have read the TGF v2 document and think it reads well.
I have a few minor comments (primarily items that have understandably occurred in the large editing session that was undertaken to produce the paper):-
- The references to ‘city’ or ‘smart city’ need to be removed (there are only around 3 or 4 of these)
- The duplicated [B1] pattern (on pages 35/36) should be removed
- There is also some duplicated material in pattern [B8] (page 34) that should also be removed
- Some of the text in the diagrams in pattern [S1] are hard to read – one diagram has already fixed this by making the text white where there is a blue background).
- Figures 3 and 4 in [B3} would also benefit from this treatment.
- There are some broken links e.g. under ‘Linkages’ in [B3] and [S3]
- [B5] states that it is a key input to [B9]. I suggest that should also be stated in the Linkages section of that pattern.
- [BR1] refers to [BM8]. This should read [B10]
Regards
Nig
Nig Greenaway
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