It is not the way we usually do business in the SC, but I would be willing to vote on the replacement text over email. Give Paul a chance to look at version RP3, then call a vote of the demo participants and see if nobody objects. We could give Jane an
improved version by tomorrow,which does not hold up the promotion too much.
Best,
--Richard
If we resolve on a new abstract (just the demo. participants need to all agree) we can vote on the update next week at the SC and ask Jane to update at that point. Do not want promotion to be held up and we did approve
the initial version today.
It is just an abstract to draw awareness and attention. Do no forget that Richard is still working on the larger (~ 500 word) full description to provide Jane shortly which can be infused with more details on value proposition,
etc.
Kind regards,
Matt
From: "Probst, Richard" <richard.probst@sap.com>
To: "Lipton, Paul C" <Paul.Lipton@ca.com>, "tosca-interop@lists.oasis-open.org"
<tosca-interop@lists.oasis-open.org>
Date: 08/26/2013 01:50 PM
Subject: RE: [tosca-interop] Groups - OASIS TOSCA Interop Demo - Abstract - 2013-08-26 RP3.docx uploaded
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Hi Paul,
Yes, I edited your second upload. You will see the red-lines.
I changed all instances of “This demo” to “The demo” because I believe it reads better, and the context is clear as soon as someone has read the first sentence. But if you really insist, change it back.
Since the SC approved the draft today and Matt immediately sent it to Jane to get it posted ASAP, I think changes should be copied to the SC, so I don’t want to take this offline. We should be able to converge it
quickly, before people get sick of the spam.
Best,
--Richard
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Sent: Monday, August 26, 2013 11:39 AM
To: Probst, Richard; tosca-interop@lists.oasis-open.org
Subject: RE: [tosca-interop] Groups - OASIS TOSCA Interop Demo - Abstract - 2013-08-26 RP3.docx uploaded
Hi Richard,
Thanks for the iteration. FYI, there were actually a number of minor and some medium level tweaks, as well, to sentences, e.g. for a minor one, don’t call the demo “the OASIS demo,” but rather “This OASIS demo,” unless you never
think we’ll have another OASIS demo. :-)
More seriously, please bear with me, as I will have to take a look later today. Could you please confirm (offline if you want) that you based this on my second upload (revision #2) at
https://www.oasis-open.org/apps/org/workgroup/tosca-interop/download.php/50444/OASIS%20TOSCA%20Interop%20Demo%20-%20Abstract%20-%202013-08-26%20PL2.docx?
If anybody wants Richard and me to take this often line, just let us know, of course.
Thanks,
Paul
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Subject: [tosca-interop] Groups - OASIS TOSCA Interop Demo - Abstract - 2013-08-26 RP3.docx uploaded
Submitter's message
Paul, if we want to put the value proposition first, we can do that. However, I think that this will require a little more editing than simply changing the order of sentences, so I am not comfortable with this revision. In the spirit of rapid iteration, here
is a revision to your revision.
Best,
--Richard
-- Mr. Richard Probst
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