RE: [ws-rx] Editorial comments on WSRM WD 10

[Doug Davis <dug@us.ibm.com>]

try:  http://www.oasis-open.org/apps/org/workgroup/ws-rx-editors/download.php/16958/wsrm-1.1-spec-wd-11.odt
Its in the editor's playarea.
thanks,
-Doug

"Paul Cotton" <Paul.Cotton@microsoft.com>

03/02/2006 11:29 AM

To	Doug Davis/Raleigh/IBM@IBMUS
cc	<ws-rx@lists.oasis-open.org>, "Matthew Lovett" <MLOVETT@uk.ibm.com>
Subject	RE: [ws-rx] Editorial comments on WSRM WD 10

I just looked in the TC’s
document repository [1] and cannot find this Editor’s draft.  Can
you supply a pointer?
 
/paulc
 
[1] http://www.oasis-open.org/apps/org/workgroup/ws-rx/documents.php

Paul Cotton, Microsoft Canada
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From: Doug Davis [mailto:dug@us.ibm.com]
Sent: March 2, 2006 11:04 AM
To: Matthew Lovett
Cc: ws-rx@lists.oasis-open.org
Subject: Re: [ws-rx] Editorial comments on WSRM WD 10
 

Matt,  thanks - I've just checked in a new WD that has these fixed.
Please open a new issue for the 718&728 problem.
As for the schema/wsdl missing from the pdf I'll let someone else comment
on that  :-) 

thanks 
-Doug

Matthew Lovett <MLOVETT@uk.ibm.com>

03/02/2006 10:32 AM

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Subject	[ws-rx] Editorial comments on WSRM WD 10

 

Hi all,

Here are some editorial nits that I noted down. They are not serious, but it would be nice if they were folded into the next WD. (Certainly no need to fix them for the CD we are about to create.) All line numbers apply to wsrm-1.1-spec-wd-10.pdf

165: Wordsmith?

236: 2 full stops, Next sentance starts adruptly. Perhaps reword to "The <wsrm:CreateSequence> element ..."

335: Some of the text is blue, it seems to be an embedded mailto: link!

338: Should there be an element wildcard as well as an attribute one? The (non-normative) schema includes both.

368 & 381: Should we drop the quotes around 'close'?

369-370: Drop the 2 commas?

382: <wsrm:Final> is defined below not above

382: Drop the "Note, " preamble from the sentance, reword to "Wherever possible the SequenceClosed Fault SHOULD be used in place of the SequenceTerminated Fault to allow the RM Source to still receive Acknowledgements."

431-433: Drop the 3 commas?

435: Drop the "Note, " preamble, reword to "Under normal usage ..."

563: I don't think we can 'advertise the timing of acks in policy' any more...

610: Reword "... when the Sequence is no longer receiving new message for the specified sequence." to "... when the Sequence is closed."

659-660: "CreateSequenceRefused is a possible fault reply for this operation." In the given context, there is no operation! Perhaps better to say "CreateSequenceRefused is a possible fault reply for the CreateSequence operation."

718 & 728: The latter constrains the language used for the faultstring to be in english, the former does not. Which is correct?

863: Missing space.

923: The schema was included in a box in prior revisions. I preferred it that way! The same comment applies to the wsdl file.

1173: The line numbers have gone wrong from here onwards.

Thanks

Matt