NEW ISSUE: suggested editorial tweaks

[Christopher B Ferris <chrisfer@us.ibm.com>]

Title: editorial tweaks

Description:

suggested editorial tweaks

Target: core (CD3 WS-RM)

Proposal:

change line 141 from:

The protocol supports reliability features
which include ordered delivery, duplicate elimination, ...

to:

The protocol supports reliability features
that enable ordered delivery, duplicate elimination, ...

Change line 143:

In any case the wire protocol does not
change.

to:

Regardless of which of the reliability
features are employed, the wire protocol does not change.

Change line 218 from:

associated acknowledgement may have
been lost.

to:

associated acknowledgement might have
been lost.

Line 337: text is BLUE, should be black.

Change line 370 from:

If the RM Source wishes to close the
Sequence then it sends a

to:

If the RM Source wishes to close the
Sequence, then it sends a

There are numerous places throughout
the specification where the term "Sequence"
uses lower-case "S". I believe
that all uses of the term Sequence should be typographically
consistent and use a capital "S".

s/sequence/Sequence/g where the term
is used as a noun.

I also spotted a couple of instances
where the term RM Source used a lower-case "s".

s/RM source/RM Source/g
s/RM destination/RM Destination/g

Change line 534 from:

The RM Source may request an acknowledgement

to:

The RM Source MAY request an acknowledgement


Cheers,

Christopher Ferris
STSM, Software Group Standards Strategy
email: chrisfer@us.ibm.com
blog: http://www.ibm.com/developerworks/blogs/dw_blog.jspa?blog=440
phone: +1 508 377 9295