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Subject: Editorial issues with the latest editor's draft
Hi all, Since we seem to be getting to the end of this process, here are a bunch of editorial nits that we should fix. Table 1, which lists the namespaces referenced in the spec, should include wsse (as used in section 6.1). If we do not want to nominate a specific level of the spec then we should list the alternatives. c.f. the definition for prefix 'S'. Figure 1. When printed in black and white, the "Scope of RM Protocol" text and circle are hard to read. Perhaps use a darker colour, if we can without obscuring the rest of the diagram. 3.1 Sequence Creation. Both AcksTo and Offer/Endpoint are of wsa:EndpointReferenceType. Therefore they both have element and attribute extensibility, as defined by WS-A. However the exemplar (and following text) illustrates them differently. My suggestion to the editors is that we strike the ellipsis from AcksTo, and delete lines 318 - 320. Line 349 seems to be in the wrong font. Ditto 373. We should move lines 362 - 372 above 356. The create sequence response exemplar and text should be updated in line with the other EndpointReferences. My suggestion is to delete the ellipsis, and strike lines 445-447. 3.2 Closing a sequence Line 479 - 481. We have a repetition of 'wherever possible'. Please strike the second occurrence, and surrounding punctuation. 3.6 Sequence acknowledgement Move the text about None (lines 739 - 743) up to line 722 (e.g. just after AcknowledgementRange) 3.7 MakeConnection Line 773. I'm not sure if this reads better with an 's' -- "which may be used to uniquely identify anonymous endpoint*s*", or make it singular "which may be used to uniquely identify *an* anonymous endpoint". Line 776: Typo {uudi} for {uuid} Section 5.2.2 Line 1201: Typo [WS-SecureConverstaion] Line 1279: Typo missing space in "key(e.g.," Line 1289: Typo replace "an" with "and". Also insert "the" after the comma in "headers, *the* fault behaviour" Compare <wsrm:UsesSequenceSTR> and <wsrm:UseSequenceSSL> should it be Use or Uses? Comments on the schema file: Line 204: Within OfferType, IncompleteSequenceBehaviour should hav minOccurs = 0 Line 37: Within SequenceAcknowledgement, Nack should not have a minOccurs attribute Line 69: Within MakeConnection, the attribute wildcard should not include the 'use' attribute Line 84. In Identifier element remove the second attribute wildcard - it has already been incuded on line 81. Line 223: In Expires element remove the second attribute wildcard - it has already been incuded on line 220. Line 98/99: Within MakeConnectionType, the intent is one or the other, or both. The schema doesn't capture that, should we put in a more complex content model to make it happen? (Is it even possble to express in schema? I have a feeling that this is what xs:all does, but I'm not sure) Insert definitions of UsesSequenceSTR and UseSequenceSSL elements Comments on the wsdl file: This should be pulling in the new WS-A WSDL namespace, and replace wsa:Action with wsaw:Action. That might mean a second update to the namespaces table at the start of the spec. Perhaps we are waiting for this to become a reccomendation? Thanks Matt
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