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Subject: Re: [wsdm] Groups - wd-wsdm-primer-mows-1-1-me.doc uploaded


Thanks Kirk,

I just did not like "NOTE:"  I think that "Note" is an improvement, but 
please note I did not feel that "Please note" was cast in a pleading 
tone, but more of a 'familiar' tone.  Anyway, no objections here to your 
suggested change.

Regards,

Mark


Wilson, Kirk D wrote:

>Mark,  As usual, your revisions are very good and improve the
>readability of the text.  However, the one thing I question is the use
>of "Please note" where the original text may have had "Note" or "NOTE:".
>There are 25 occurrences of the word "Please" in the text--that is
>better than a "Please" every other page!!  After awhile I think it
>starts sounding like pleading with the reader to do something--"Oh,
>won't you please do this".  I don't think we should plead so much. I
>vote just going back to "Note".  
>
>(I think I had a subtle difference between "Note" and "NOTE:"--the
>former is something that the reader could see in the preceding text; the
>latter constituted independent information that supplements the provided
>information--but I'm not sure I always followed my own convention and
>perhaps the distinction is too subtle and is lost on the reader.)
>
>Anyone have thoughts on this?
>
>Kirk Wilson
>Architect, Development
>Office of the CTO
>802 765-4337
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>Subject: [wsdm] Groups - wd-wsdm-primer-mows-1-1-me.doc uploaded
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>The document named wd-wsdm-primer-mows-1-1-me.doc has been submitted by
>Mark Ellison to the OASIS Web Services Distributed Management (WSDM) TC
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>Document Description:
>These are my readability edits for the MOWS primer.
>
>Hopefully these changes improve reader understanding of this primer and
>hopefully I have not altered the technical accuracy of this material.
>
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