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Subject: Public Review comments - editorial
Here are some minor editorial comments on the second public draft. Subbu ----------------------------------- Sec 6.3: navigationalContext appears a few times with a trailing double quote - as in _navigationalContext"_. Something to clean up in your draft. Sec 6.11.2: Uses "." in place "," in the second sentence (While the value of the navigationalContext ...) In the same sentence, "and management of" reads better than "and managing of" In the next sentence, "the purpose of this notification is to enable..." reads better than "... is enabling ...". The third sentence is also hard to parse. The connection between "the purpose of this notification is" and "to manage an extension of this state" seems lost. Sec 10.2.1.3: The meaning of the second sentence is not clear. The first and second parts of the sentence seem to be saying the opposite things. Sec 10.2.4: The last sentence "Note that the discussion ..." seems vague. >>Register now for BEA World 2006 --- See http://www.bea.com/beaworld<< _______________________________________________________________________ Notice: This email message, together with any attachments, may contain information of BEA Systems, Inc., its subsidiaries and affiliated entities, that may be confidential, proprietary, copyrighted and/or legally privileged, and is intended solely for the use of the individual or entity named in this message. If you are not the intended recipient, and have received this message in error, please immediately return this by email and then delete it.