[wss] editorial comments: draft 6 ws security core 8 Dec 02

[Frederick.Hirsch@nokia.com]

I have some editorial comments on draft 6 of the ws security core
draft 8 Dec 02

2.3 [174]  perhaps sort terms alphabetically

Move 6.3.1, 6.2.2, and 6.3.4 to the beginning of section 6, before Username Tokens, since
they are common to all tokens and there is duplication here. Modify 6.2.2 to remove the word "binary" since it
applies to all tokens [557]s;binary;;, [558]s;binary;;

6.3.3 is misplaced, should be in introduction to spec

[586]-[587] Remove this sentence, or give more detail (it is not meaningful unless you already know):
"A new attribute is introduced, as there are currently issues that make derivations
of mixed simple and complex types difficult within XML Schema"

7.1 [641] Indicate this is Abstract type. [664]Remove example - it is misleading here, and is repeated
in 7.2

[694] s;SHAL;SHALL;

[709] s;If a direct reference is not possible;Alternatively, if a direct reference is not used;
(who is to determine possibility)

[710] s;key name;ds:KeyName;

[756] s;defined are the following convention;;
[756] s;, which;;
[757] s;822;822, as shown in this example:;

[821] s;xpath;XPath;

[904] s;add;;

[909] s;have;;

[1039] show attachment with cid header in example?

[1126] s;..process;process;

[1469] move last sentence to end of [1455]

[1478] s;set;; ??

[1487] s;RECOMMEND;RECOMMENDED;


regards, Frederick
 
Frederick Hirsch
Nokia Mobile Phones