Re: [wss] Comments on oasis-0005-wss-username-token-profile-1[1].0.pdf

[NISHIMURA Toshihiro <nishimura.toshi@jp.fujitsu.com>]

Hello,

I checked the newly posted document (with same name).

At Thu, 11 Dec 2003 22:21:14 -0600,
Anthony Nadalin wrote:
> (1) Done, chose WSS: SOAP Message Security

How about Line 2 (the title of this document)?
Doesn't it need ":"?


> (2) Done, chose Username Token

It seems that you chose "UsernameToken".

And it came to me that the title uses "UsernameToken" and the document
footer uses "Username Token".

> (3) Done
> (4) PDF Problem
> (5) Done
> (6) Done
> (7) Done

(7) is not corrected.
Sitll using "S:" at Line 196, 198, 207, 209, 214, 216, 231 and 233.

And at Line 211, I found:
  "an creation timestamp" --> "a creation timestamp"

> (8) Done

(8) is not corrected. Line 245.



> (9) Done
> 
> Subject: Re: [wss] Comments on
> oasis-0005-wss-username-token-profile-1[1].0.pdf
>       From: NISHIMURA Toshihiro <nishimura.toshi@jp.fujitsu.com>
>       To: wss@lists.oasis-open.org
>       Date: Fri, 12 Dec 2003 10:56:19 +0900
> 
> Hello,
> 
> At Thu, 11 Dec 2003 11:25:12 -0800,
> Blake Dournaee wrote:
> > 2.         Line 117: The term 'providers' is used to describe a web
> service
> > provider, yet in line 119, they are called 'producers.' Should we use
> > consistent terminology here?
> 
> In section "1 Introduction", the words "web service consumer" and
> "web service" are used. It is better to use same terminology.
> 
> 
> Here are another editorial comments:
> 
> 1. ":" should be used in the spec name (?)
> Line 45  Web Services Security (WSS) SOAP Message Security
> Line 61  WSS: SOAP Message Security
> Line 85  WSS-SOAP Message Security
> Line 243 WSS: SOAP Message Security
> Line 272 WSS SOAP Message Security
> Line 2-3 Web Services Security UsernameToken Profile 1.0
> 
> 2. Terminology "Username Token"
>   When we imply the element, "<wsse:UsernameToken>" should be used.
>   But when we use it as a common noun, which should we use?
>   - UsernameToken
>   - username Token
>   - Username Token
> 
> Line  15 UsernameToken
> Line  45 UsernameToken
> Line 102 Username token
> Line 120 UsernameToken
> Line 124 UsernameTokens
> Line 146 username
> Line 233 Username Token
> Line 236 Username Token
> Line 237 UsernameToken
> Line 238 username Token
> Line 239 UsernameToken
> Line 249 <UsernameToken>
> Line 266 UsernameToken
> Line 271 Username token
> (Line 267 SecurityTokens)
> 
> 3. Attribute values are enclosed in "<" and ">".
> Line 96  "<wsse:PasswordDigest>"
> Line 129 "<wsse:PasswordText> or <wsse:PasswordDigest>"
> Line 234 "<wsse:UsernameToken>"
> 
> 4. Line 135-136 Unnecessary newline (new paragraph)
> 
> 5. Line 146, 148, 150
>    Should these paragraphs be indented?
> 
> 6. Line 177
>    "Nonce element" should be "<wsse:Nonce> element" or just "nonce"
> 
> 7. Line 193-206
>   Though the namespace declaration uses "S11", <Envelope> and <Header>
>   elements have "S:" prefix.
> 
> 8. Line 242 "may" --> "MAY" ?
> 
> 9. Line 251 "in the Web Services Security: Username Token Profile
>    Document."
>    Is it better to use "this document" or "this specification"?
> 
> ---
> NISHIMURA Toshihiro (FAMILY Given)
> nishimura.toshi@jp.fujitsu.com
> XML/Web Services Technology Dept.,
> STRATEGY AND TECHNOLOGY DIV., FUJITSU LIMITED
> 
> Anthony Nadalin | work 512.436.9568 | cell 512.289.4122
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NISHIMURA Toshihiro (FAMILY Given)
nishimura.toshi@jp.fujitsu.com
XML/Web Services Technology Dept.,
STRATEGY AND TECHNOLOGY DIV., FUJITSU LIMITED