RE: [xacml] Groups - oasis-xacml-profile-multiple-resources-wd-03.pdf uploaded

[Tim Moses <tim.moses@entrust.com>]

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Hi Anne - Here are some comments on the multiple resources profile.  All the
best.  Tim.

In sections 3.1.3 and 3.2.3 outcomes of "Indeterminate" and "NotApplicable"
are not currently discussed.

Trivial ...

19 - Include instructions for using the Web form to submit comments (see
text on the front page of the core spec.).
52 - unbold "authorization".  Only "decision request" is in the glossary.
121 and elsewhere - I prefer not to use the section title in the section
reference (e.g. Section 4.1:"scope").  This is because it isn't always clear
where the section title ends and the normal text continues.
132 - Change "is the contents of the <AttributeValue>" to "SHALL be the
contents of the <AttributeValue> element".
146 - <children> to <Children> and <descendants> to <Descendants>.  Also,
how about a shorter title for sections 2.1 and 2.2.  I suggest: "Nodes
identified by scope" and "Nodes identified by XPath"?
In Section 2.1, include a note to the effect that "scope" is defined in
Section 4.
161 - Eliminate duplicate "be".
168 & 170 - Change "the Individual Resources are" to "each Individual
Resource is".
196 - Change "attribute evaluates" to "attribute is an xpath expression that
evaluates".
223 - Correct formatting of <Resource>.
224 - Change "the mechanisms" to "the other mechanisms".
243 - Eliminate duplicate "a".
266 - Eliminate leading space.
277 - Change "containing" to "contains".
277 - Eliminate "That node SHALL be the one corresponding to the new request
context.".  I think this is redundant.  Isn't it?
295 - Eliminate leading space.
305 - Eliminate "That node SHALL be the one corresponding to the new request
context.".  I think this is redundant.  Isn't it?


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Subject: [xacml] Groups - oasis-xacml-profile-multiple-resources-wd-03.pdf
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The document oasis-xacml-profile-multiple-resources-wd-03.pdf has been
submitted by Anne Anderson (Anne.Anderson@Sun.com) to the OASIS eXtensible
Access Control Markup Language TC document repository.

Document Description:
XACML Profile for Requests for Multiple Resources, Working Draft 03, 3
August 2004, PDF format.  Includes the following changes: "Contributors"
moved to "Acknowledgments" due to lack of room on front page, Bill and Simon
affiliation changed to GlueCode Software, added Ron Jacobson to
Acknowledgments, Added mechanism for requesting a single response for access
to an entire hierarchy, added new "scope" attribute values for the
XPath-expression mechanism and for the "entire hierarchy" mechanism, and
editorial changes for greater clarity.

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