RE: [soa-eerp] Changes required to submitted document - SOA-EERP Business ServiceLevel Agreement Version 1.0

["eerp_sy@changfeng.org.cn" <eerp_sy@changfeng.org.cn>]

Kim, 

All required changes are fixed, and new version of specs are uploaded onto
TC repository @
http://www.oasis-open.org/apps/org/workgroup/soa-eerp/documents.php . The
whole submission package is uploaded onto
http://www.oasis-open.org/committees/download.php/39775/SOA-EERP-PR02-submis
sion-package.zip. 

Please let me know if there are any problems on this new submission
package. 

Regards, 



Szu Chang 


Original Message:
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From: Kim Goolsby kim.goolsby@oasis-open.org
Date: Tue, 12 Oct 2010 12:51:41 -0400
To: soa-eerp@lists.oasis-open.org, mary.mcrae@oasis-open.org
Subject: [soa-eerp] Changes required to submitted document - SOA-EERP
Business ServiceLevel Agreement Version 1.0


*TCADMIN-253 <http://tools.oasis-open.org/issues/browse/TCADMIN-253>*
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* <http://tools.oasis-open.org/issues/browse/TCADMIN-253>**Hi all,

My comments below contain required changes plus suggestions. The suggestions
are just that, suggestions only.

Please make the following changes to this document:
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* <http://tools.oasis-open.org/issues/browse/TCADMIN-253>**
1. In 'This Version', the underlying URIs for the doc & pdf files are
incorrect. Please change from
http://docs.oasis-open.org/soa-eerp/sla/v1.0/SOA-EERP-bSLA-Spec-wd09.xxx to
http://docs.oasis-open.org/soa-eerp/sla/v1.0/SOA-EERP-bSLA-Spec-cd04.xxx.
That is, change /wd09/ to /cd04/.

2. In 'Previous Version', the document links are broken because the spelling
of the filenames differ from those of the actual documents. Change from
http://docs.oasis-open.org/soa-eerp/sla/v1.0/SOA-EERP-BSLA-Spec-cd03.xxx to
http://docs.oasis-open.org/soa-eerp/sla/v1.0/SOA-EERP-BSLA-spec-cd03.html.
That is, change 'Spec' to 'spec'. Please remember to correct the underlying
URIs as well.

3. Also in 'Previous Version', the underlying URI for the html file contains
extra spaces at the end (%0D), which results in a broken link. Please
remove.

4. In 'Latest Version', please change the text URIs from
http://docs.oasis-open.org/soa-eerp/sla/v1.0/SOA-EERP-bSLA-Specification.xxx
 to
http://docs.oasis-open.org/soa-eerp/sla/v1.0/SOA-EERP-BSLA-Specification.xxx
<http://docs.oasis-open.org/soa-eerp/sla/v1.0/SOA-EERP-bSLA-Specification.xx
x>
. That is, change 'bSLA' to 'BSLA'. The filenames in the underlying URIs are
correct although two are broken links (see #5 below).

5. Also in 'Latest Version', the underlying URIs for  the html & doc files
contain extra spaces at the end (%0D), which results in broken links. Please
remove.

6.  In the 'Technical Committee' section, please change text from bold to
regular weight.

7. In 'Related Work', the first bullet contains a broken link. Please change
from
http://docs.oasis-open.org/soa-eerp/rt/v1.0/SOA-EERP-bRating-Specification.p
dfto
http://docs.oasis-open.org/soa-eerp/rt/v1.0/SOA-EERP-Rating-Specification.pd
f,
removing the errant 'b' from 'bRating'. Note that this was correct in the
previous version.

8. In 'Normative References', I suggest adding the date to [UBL-20-cbc]. The
date is October 2006.

9. Also, in 'Normative References', I suggest adding the date to
[UBL-20-udt]. The date is February 2005.

10. Also, in 'Normative References', for [ISO8601], I suggest changing this
to a publicly-accessible URI. This link requires authenticated sign-in.

11.
Please generate an html version of this document in addition to word & pdf
versions.

Please contact me with any questions or comments.

Best regards,
Kim
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Kim Goolsby
Publications Specialist
OASIS Open: Advancing open standards for the information society
email: kim.goolsby@oasis-open.org
web: www.oasis-open.org
phone: 1.734.223.6890


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