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Subject: Re: [soa-rm-ra] correct attachment [was: [soa-rm-ra] SOA RAF Security Section edits]
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From: Ken Laskey
Sent: 08/13/12 04:15 AM
To: 'Kevin Smith'
Subject: [soa-rm-ra] correct attachment [was: [soa-rm-ra] SOA RAF Security Section edits]
Won’t do much good if I just attach Kevin’s documents and have you guess at my suggested edits :)
Ken
From: soa-rm-ra@lists.oasis-open.org [mailto:soa-rm-ra@lists.oasis-open.org] On Behalf Of Ken Laskey
Sent: Saturday, August 11, 2012 2:44 PM
To: 'Kevin Smith'
Cc: soa-rm-ra@lists.oasis-open.org
Subject: RE: [soa-rm-ra] SOA RAF Security Section edits
I attempted a careful read through and my final comments are attached. There is some wordsmithing and a few things deleted where they are redundant or don’t flow. The major substantive change is an addition at the end of section 5.2.1. During the call a few weeks ago, the discussion with Michael and Rex led to the paragraph about policy negotiation. The phrasing in numerous places gave me an uncomfortable feeling of tight policy coupling; my added words are meant to address that.
Ken
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Dr. Kenneth Laskey
MITRE Corporation, M/S H305 phone: 703-983-7934
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From: Kevin Smith [mailto:kevintrentsmith@gmail.com]
Sent: Saturday, August 04, 2012 11:50 AM
To: Ken Laskey
Cc: soa-rm-ra@lists.oasis-open.org
Subject: Re: [soa-rm-ra] SOA RAF Security Section edits
All - thank you for your comments.. I just did another significant round of edits.
I'm headed to the beach on a family vacation for the week - looking forward to talking & getting feedback when I get back!
-Kevin
On Tue, Jul 31, 2012 at 6:21 PM, Ken Laskey <klaskey@mitre.org> wrote:
Kevin,
Attached is a markup of the security section. I made edits to substitute terms defined and used (hopefully) consistently in the rest of the document, and made some pure wordsmithing suggestions where I found the text awkward. I had more significant issues with the Identity Propagation section. I captured these in the comment to the section 5.2.5.1 heading and then suggested some wording changes in the remainder of the section.
Happy processing.
Ken
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Dr. Kenneth Laskey
MITRE Corporation, M/S H305 phone: 703-983-7934
7515 Colshire Drive fax: 703-983-1379
McLean VA 22102-7508
From: soa-rm-ra@lists.oasis-open.org [mailto:soa-rm-ra@lists.oasis-open.org] On Behalf Of Kevin Smith
Sent: Monday, July 30, 2012 4:13 PM
To: soa-rm-ra@lists.oasis-open.org
Subject: [soa-rm-ra] SOA RAF Security Section edits
All,
Attached are my edits to the security section, taking a careful look at Michael's comments on the security section and based on our discussion at the last meeting.
Michael - take a look at this and let me know if this looks better..
Thanks,
Kevin
Attachment:
Security Model-KevinSmith-August4th-kjl - MP.docx
Description: Attachment: Security Model-KevinSmith-August4th-kjl - MP.docx
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