Re: [emergency] NOAA Letter and meeting today a 3:00 EDT

[Elysa Jones <ejones@warningsystems.com>]

Good suggestions, I will incorporate into the draft.  Elysa

At 11:45 AM 6/16/2006, Rex Brooks wrote:
>Thanks Elysa,
>
>I am available today for the call.
>
>I think the first paragraph is a bit disjointed. 
>I think the second sentence should not be one 
>long sentence, but two shorter ones. Also the 
>last sentence does not seem to belong with the 
>paragraph's overall thought and sounds like 
>something I would expect the addressee (along 
>with whomever else we are addressing by 
>implication) to know. I think it should be a 
>separate short paragraph. I suggest:
>
>I am writing on behalf of the Emergency 
>Management Technical Committee (EMTC) of the 
>Organization for the Advancement of Structured 
>Information Standards (OASIS). We would like to 
>commend your staff for utilizing the Common 
>Alerting Protocol (CAP) as the basis for the 
>HazCollect system, an NWS initiative in 
>partnership with the Federal Emergency 
>Management Agency. We also want to address an 
>anticipated far reaching problem with the system in its current form.
>As you may know, HazCollect enables federal, 
>state and local emergency managers to 
>automatically forward Non-Weather Emergency 
>Messages into the NOAA All-Hazard Radio network 
>and other NOAA public dissemination systems.
>
>I would also break the current second paragraph 
>into at least two paragraphs, breaking with the 
>sentence that starts: "Deviation...."
>
>Regards,
>Rex
>
>At 10:46 AM -0500 6/16/06, Elysa Jones wrote:
>>TC Members,
>>
>>Patti and I have worked on the NOAA letter 
>>which is attached.  Please review as soon as 
>>possible. I would like to have a telecon to 
>>accept any final comments and approve the 
>>letter with a quorum this afternoon if 
>>possible.  Please try to be available for a 
>>very short call at 3:00EDT.  Reply to the list 
>>if can make this. Thank you, Elysa
>>
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