#6.7 Errata comments - typo, grammar, and miscellaneous glitches

["Dennis E. Hamilton" <dennis.hamilton@acm.org>]

Re: http://lists.oasis-open.org/archives/office-comment/200808/msg00059.html

My intention here is to report on the remaining 5 comments of mine.  I pray
that I don't discover any more additional problems.

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          ODF 1.0     IS 26300
Section   page line   page line

9.3.3     300  11     304  5

The instruction is in two parts (not numbered in the Errata):

[1] Replace "," with "." at the end of "representation."

[2] Insert "is" before "OLE" in the second sentence.

Change [2] results in this sentence:

An example for this kind of objects is OLE objects (see [OLE]).

Recommendation:

Replace [2] with 

[2'] Replace "An example of this kind of objects OLE objects" with "OLE
objects are examples of this kind"

resulting in 

OLE objects are examples of this kind (see [OLE]).

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          ODF 1.0     IS 26300
Section   page line   page line

9.3.3     301  1      304  36

*NOTE: The sentence that is to be replaced begins on line 2, not line 1.

The instruction is to replace the second sentence of the list item with a
replacement that begins

For objects that have an XML representation the representation of the object
is ...

The immediately beginning sentence starts with "For objects that have an XML
representation ..." and it establishes the context for the second sentence.

Recommendation:

In the replacement statement in the instruction, replace "For objects that
have an XML representation, the" with "The"

The complete resulting list item will then be

  -  For objects that have an XML representation, the link
     references the sub package of the object.  The representation
     of the object is the equivalent to a separate document
     representing that object, except that it is stored in
     a folder in the document package.  The xlink references
     that folder.

[This creates more new questions than it answers, but that is for another
time.]

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          ODF 1.0     IS 26300
Section   page line   page line

9.5       319  23     334  36

The reference to the same passage in IS 26300 is incorrect.  The incorrect
26300 reference is near the first erratum for section 9.5.3.

Recommendation:  Replace the IS 26300 reference so the erratum is located at

9.5       319  23     323  24

[I have not systematically checked the page references between ODF 1.0 and
IS 26300.  I caught this one because it was obviously strange.  I have this
nagging suspicion that I should run through the entire list and verify all
of the pairs of citations.]

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          ODF 1.0     IS 26300
Section   page line   page line

15.27.21  651  3      662  39

The instruction is to

Replace "left side" with "the right side".  

However, "the" is already in front of "left side".

Recommendation

To avoid doubling "the," change the instruction to

Replace "left side" with "right side".

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          ODF 1.0     IS 26300
Section   page line   page line

15.31.4   664  19     676  40

The instruction replaces one sizable passage with a larger one.  In the
replacement, the next-to-last sentence begins

"The chart:tick-marks-major-outer attribute specifies marks point in the ...
"

Recommendation:

Change "marks point" to "marks that point" in the replacement fragment
quoted above.  

Alternative:

Change "marks point" to "that marks point" if that is more to the point
[sorry].

 - Dennis

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From: robert_weir@us.ibm.com [mailto:robert_weir@us.ibm.com] 
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To: Dennis E. Hamilton; Sheldon Britton; Dave Pawson;
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Cc: office@lists.oasis-open.org; office-comment@lists.oasis-open.org; Mary
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Subject: [office] ODF 1.0 Approved Errata 01 -- Public review comments

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The following comments were received during the ODF 1.0 Approved Errata 01 
document public review period:

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[#6] Dennis E. Hamilton: 
http://lists.oasis-open.org/archives/office-comment/200808/msg00059.html

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