Using
the line numbers found in the wd03 document, here’s the
list…
I
can call you and show you these with a video call earlier
before the 11 am meeting. I will log in at 9 am and check if
and when you’d like to do that. We can use my Zoom.
Many
of these you will be able to see right away from the listing
below, but the yellow stuff will just be easier to show you.
Line
156 -
extra
blank
Line
189 – capital letter
Line
288 – extra period
Line
302 - extra ‘s’ on the word ‘distribution’
Line
312 - the snippet “for this element” is present in WD03, but
had been removed in the re-write.
Line
330 – missing comma
Line
338 – “as broad or narrow” should be “is broad or narrow”
Lines
343-352 – (section 3) 4 word tweaks not incorporated
Line
354-407 – (section 3.1) 9 word tweaks and corrections not
incorporated
Line
417 – missing the word “anticipated”
Line
468 – sentence ends with 4 periods
Line
569 -
capital
letter
Line
574 -
capital
letter
There
are a few things, like extra spaces in text, that are in all
copies and were just spotted now…
Line
44 'if' to 'of'
Line
46 Extra space before "Consumers.."
Line
252 ?
Line
564 Extra space between "cases" and "the"
Line
720
Images
Section
3.2 - Spectrum = Fire / Time, not copied over from my draft
to yours
Section
3.3 – Spectrum = Fire / Urgency, not replaced from my draft
to yours with… Spectrum Fire / Impact
Section
3.4 – Spectrum = Infectious Disease / Action… seems like it
should be retitled if we voted down Infectious Disease.
OET-200
in appendix B, should be “transport issue”
Appendix
C missing this latest revision
Norm
From: Rex Brooks <rexb@starbourne.com>
Sent: October 7, 2021 3:15 PM
To: Paulsen,Norm (ECCC)
<Norm.Paulsen@ec.gc.ca>
Cc: Jacob Westfall <jake@netalerts.org>;
Elysa Jones <elysajones@yahoo.com>
Subject: Re: [emergency-cap] Groups -
etl-v1.0-cn01-wd03.docx uploaded
Hi
Norm,
I
hope it's not endless, but...
Please
send them over tonight. It's unlikely I'll get to them since
I've turned into a bit more of a sundowner in the last few
years, and I'd rather not do these last changes tonight.
However, if I have an idea of how many changes other than a
revised Acknowledgements, I can adjust my schedule to
accommodate this.
I've
always been a morning person and my performance is better in
those hours... So I'd rather be safe than sorry.
We
may want to have a special SC meeting to get its approval of
these changes so that we have it properly minuted. I would
not be in favor of a "with pending changes" tacked onto the
approval tomorrow.
A
special meeting could be Monday anytime for me or Tuesday
before the TC meeting.
Cheers,
Rex
On 10/7/2021 11:17 AM, Paulsen,Norm
(ECCC) wrote:
Rex..
I did a comparison and yes there are several misses to report….
For example…
1. Section 2, line 5, extra blank
2. Section 2, line 6, extra space and extra period.
3. Section 2.9, line 11, extra ‘s’ on the word ‘distribution’
4. Section 2.10, line 8, the snippet “for this element” is present in WD03, but had been removed in the re-write.
5. Etc…
There are a number of these.
I can easily show them tomorrow, or do you want them fully listed like the above and sent over tonight. I could do that after 10pm tonight.
Norm
From: emergency-cap@lists.oasis-open.org <emergency-cap@lists.oasis-open.org> On Behalf Of Rex Brooks
Sent: October 6, 2021 4:17 PM
To: emergency-cap@lists.oasis-open.org
Subject: [emergency-cap] Groups - etl-v1.0-cn01-wd03.docx uploaded
Submitter's message
This is a new Working Draft wd03. I've done my best, but we know there's always something a mere human will miss. Let's gather up any edits, changes and corrections so that with the addition of revised Acknowledgements, I can put together one more improved working draft for approval. It would be good if we could come close to wrapping up those last changes Friday 8 October 2021 for approval at next Tuesday's EMTC Meeting 12 October 2021 for the CAP Workshop and IAEM.
Rex
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