[OASIS Issue Tracker] Commented: (SOAEERP-11) PR08-E3WhitePaper-cd03 Section: *Conceptual Framework and Message Flow*

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Paul Yang  commented on SOAEERP-11:
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http://www.oasis-open.org/apps/org/workgroup/soa-eerp/download.php/37746/EERP-Model-UseCase-WhitePaper-cd03-diff-wd08.pdf

bullet #1: " * First and second sentences in Paragraph three of SubSection: ..."
 - bottom of the page 8, notice that the first sentence in the paragraph three is not updated according to Rex's comments.  Please change it to "Service providers offer business services."

bullet #2: " * /Description/ column entries for numbers 5 through 12 of the ..." 
 - top of the page 10, done

bullet #3: "* /Description/ for number 8 in tabular presentation of messages in ..."
 - top of the page 10, done

bullet #4: "/Description/ for number 11 in tabular presentation of messages in ..."
 - middle of the page 10,  following has been added for clarification "...directly, instead of getting the SLA via EERP Portal."

butllet #5: "* Suggestion: in last paragraph on page 10 SubSection: Message..."
 - top of the page 11, now we have added another sequence diagram for the optional messagess
 - look closely at the sequence diagram on page 12, notice that it says "Figure 4: EERP Message Sequence with optional messages"
   - first, what happened to figure 3?  The diagram jumped from 2 to 4.
   - second, the font is different from that sequence diagram above
   - third, alignment should be centered like that of  Figure 2
   - fourth, Font style should italic like that of Figure 
  

 
  


> PR08-E3 WhitePaper-cd03 Section: *Conceptual Framework and Message Flow* 
> -------------------------------------------------------------------------
>
>                 Key: SOAEERP-11
>                 URL: http://tools.oasis-open.org/issues/browse/SOAEERP-11
>             Project: OASIS Service-Oriented Architecture End-to-End Resource Planning (SOA-EERP) TC
>          Issue Type: Sub-task
>          Components: PR Comments
>            Reporter: Paul Yang 
>
>     * First and second sentences in Paragraph three of SubSection:
>       "Service providers *offer* business services. Each service
>       provider may *offer* the same service but with different bQoS and
>       Ratings." "provider(s) provide" is just a bit clumsy--stylistic
>       consideration only. 
>     * /Description/ column entries for numbers 5 through 12 of the
>       Tabular presentation of messages in SubSection: *Message Exchange
>       Example:* are in a larger text size than the rest of the tabular
>       material.
>     * /Description/ for number 8 in tabular presentation of messages in
>       SubSection: Message Exchange Example needs correction : ...*SLA*
>       Request message...
>     * /Description/ for number 11 in tabular presentation of messages in
>       SubSection: *Message Exchange Example*: doesn't make sense to me:
>       "Service Requester sends SLA Request message to the Service
>       Providers to obtain the commitments from the Service Providers
>       _*f**or those no SLA service in the set*_".
>     * Suggestion: in last paragraph on page 10 SubSection: Message
>       Exchange Example: "We conclude this section with a _*sequence*_
>       diagram." 

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